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Question: It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books. " Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v.1

Question: It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books. " Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v. 1
Television is an effective way to teach children. It is argued by some people that the young ones should be promoted to watch TV both at home and school. In my opinion, to some extent, I agree with this statement that it is a good source of knowledge. However, it should only be allowed to watch for a limited time and under supervision. Students can learn a great deal from television. It broadcasts some very educated programs, which are based on science and technology, which help young ones to perform better in their exams. It is also an important way of teaching children about the etiquettes of life. To illustrate, school boys and girls who watch TV score 30-40 percent more at the end of the year papers. For these reasons, watching educational channels should be encouraged at home and teaching institutes. Electronic media can promote violence and show adult movies. Parents and teachers should monitor what is being viewed by their child and students. They should also make a time table and allow only a few hours each day for such activity as watching more television can be bad for the eyes. For example, youngsters who watch more news channels tend to be violent in real life. Therefore, such recreational activities should only be allowed supervised access and for a restricted time. In conclusion, some people argue that teenagers should be made to watch television both at home and school as it is an efficient way through which they can learn. In my opinion, I agree to some extent with this narrative, but, however, I believe that it can have a negative impact too and should only be granted restricted and monitored access.
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educated programs, which
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way of teaching children about the
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of life. To illustrate, school boys and girls who
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TV score 30-40 percent more at the
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end
of the year papers. For these reasons, watching educational channels should
be encouraged
at home and teaching institutes.

Electronic media can promote violence and
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adult movies. Parents and teachers should monitor what is
being viewed
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more news channels tend to be violent in real life.
Therefore
, such recreational activities should
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be
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both at home and school as it is an efficient way through which they can learn. In my opinion, I
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IELTS essay Question: It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books. " Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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