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t has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books. ” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? Use specifc reasons and examples to v.1

t has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books. ” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? Use specifc reasons and examples to v. 1
Today, We are living in the modern technological era. Medium is one of its innovative inventions which undoubtedly have a profound effect on making people notions. This essay will reach a total consensus with mentioned statement. First and foremost, people around the globe in every walk of life have a source of media with themselves. If mobile phones are taken as an instance, This would easily be assimilated that on every short while a telemarketing call or text message is received which influenced our choice of shopping, acquiring services and so forth. Moreover, If a person surfs the internet, all businesses, political group, educators and others always remain vigilant enough to appeal people towards them through an advertisement. Furthermore the media posses the capability to show a hero as a villain and vice-versa. Consequently, today every Muslim is deemed a terrorist or a potential menace to peace. The reason, why the human race thinks in this manner, is the influence media shaping their minds by articulating this view in diverse articles, programmes, documentaries, news bulletins and so forth. However, Islam has nothing to do with the literature of those who are anti-peace and/or anti-humanity but politics have. Similarly, the more the business of entrepreneur is thriving, the more their budget for TV commercials is large, because they know that a minor investment in advertisement can benefit more than double or even more. In conclusion, I would strongly suggest that media definitely exert a profound influence on the way we think and react to a particular scenario. Hence, everybody all over the world is busy employing media for attracting flocks of people towards their cause and commercial activities.
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Today
, We are living in the modern technological era. Medium is one of its innovative inventions which
undoubtedly
have a profound effect on making
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people
notions. This essay will reach a total consensus with mentioned statement.

First
and foremost,
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people
around the globe in every walk of life have a source of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
with themselves. If mobile phones
are taken
as an instance, This would
easily
be assimilated
that on every short while a telemarketing call or text message
is received
which influenced our choice of shopping, acquiring services and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
forth.
Moreover
, If a person surfs the internet, all businesses, political group, educators
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and others
always remain vigilant
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enough
to appeal
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people
towards them through an advertisement.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
the
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media
posses the capability to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
a hero as a villain and vice-versa.
Consequently
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
every Muslim
is deemed
a terrorist or a potential menace to peace. The reason, why the human race
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thinks
in this manner, is the influence
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
shaping their minds by articulating this view in diverse articles,
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
, documentaries, news bulletins and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
forth.
However
, Islam has nothing to do with the literature of those who are anti-peace and/or anti-humanity
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
politics have.
Similarly
, the more the business of entrepreneur is thriving, the more their budget for TV commercials is large,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they know that a minor investment in advertisement can benefit more than double or even more.

In conclusion
, I would
strongly
suggest that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
definitely exert a profound influence on the way we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
and react to a particular scenario.
Hence
, everybody all over the world is busy employing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
for attracting flocks of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
towards their cause and commercial activities.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay t has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books. ” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? Use specifc reasons and examples to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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