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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.3

Question: Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 3
Increasing crime rate is an alarming threat to any society in the world. Some people say that with the use of advanced technology, crime can be decreased. However, I disagree with this statement. In my opinion crime rate seems to increase with the help of technology in the form of cyber crimes Firstly, it is undeniable that technology has helped countries in various sectors, but in terms of cutting crime it is still not effective. Even after installing cameras on streets and in public places, crime rate increased in the last few years. Nowadays, more criminal activities are occurring with the help of technology. For example, in New Zealand in February 2019, an Australian youngster attacked a Muslim temple while live streaming it on Facebook. This incident shook the whole world as crime had taken a totally different meaning with the use of technology. Secondly, apart from murders and robberies, crimes over the internet have also increased. Nowadays, hacking personal information has become easier than ever before with the help of technology. For instance in 2010, most of the cell phones in the US got a scam message that they had won 250 dollars from JB Hi-Fi and to access that they need to click on the link given. It was one of the biggest scam, as by clicking on the link most of the people gave access to their banking details to the hackers and lost big amounts of money. To sum up, crime rate is still rising despite technological advancement. The government needs to take charge and make some strict rules rather than relying on technology to curb the crime.
Increasing
crime
rate
is an alarming threat to any society in the world.
Some
people
say that with the
use
of advanced
technology
,
crime
can
be decreased
.
However
, I disagree with this statement. In my opinion
crime
rate
seems to increase with the
help
of
technology
in the form of cyber
crimes


Firstly
, it is undeniable that
technology
has
helped
countries in various sectors,
but
in terms of cutting
crime
it is
still
not effective. Even after installing cameras on streets and in public places,
crime
rate
increased in the last few years. Nowadays, more criminal activities are occurring with the
help
of
technology
.
For example
, in New Zealand in February 2019, an Australian youngster attacked a Muslim temple while
live streaming
it on Facebook. This incident shook the whole world as
crime
had taken a
totally
different
meaning with the
use
of technology.

Secondly
, apart from murders and robberies,
crimes
over the internet have
also
increased. Nowadays, hacking personal information has become easier than ever
before
with the
help
of
technology
.
For instance
in 2010, most of the cell phones in the US
got
a scam message that they had won 250 dollars from JB
Hi-Fi
and to access that they need to click on the link
given
. It was one of the biggest scam, as by clicking on the link most of the
people
gave access to their banking
details
to the hackers and lost
big
amounts of money.

To sum up,
crime
rate
is
still
rising despite technological advancement. The
government
needs to take charge and
make
some
strict
rules
rather
than relying on
technology
to curb the
crime
.
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IELTS essay Question: Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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