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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.247

Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 247
In today's technological world, things are changing at an exponential rate, and these changes affecting people's lives in every aspect. In this prospect, few individuals avoid these changes and do the same daily work over their life span, although others accept these changes positively. In my opinion, spending lives doing the same recursive work is an inappropriate way; however, this essay will explore both aspects of this discussion. It is true that this proposition does offer some benefits. For instance, if a person is doing repetitive work, the more expert level would be achieved in that task by that person and as a result on time and quality would be the outcome. Additionally, their lives would be simpler as they do not have to learn new technologies and adoption towards new changes, which could result in a simpler happier life. However, despite these benefits, escaping from innovation is not the ideal solution. In my view, welcoming these changes is a more effective way to live with. A person should adopt these changes and go along with the modern inventions as a result connected with the modern stream would be possible. Moreover, this would create a population who is following new trends and could accomplish any new challenge, since it is more needed in developing countries. I believe that these benefits have the potential to have the most profound impact on societies and individuals. All things considered, while the same working style has some advantages in both personal and professional level, it would be an ineffective way to handle any situation. I would advise people should take new changes as a challenge and try to learn new things here and there over the whole course of their lives.
In
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today
's technological world, things are changing at an exponential rate, and these
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changes
affecting
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people
's
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lives
in every aspect. In this prospect, few individuals avoid these
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changes
and do the same daily work over their life span, although others accept these
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changes
positively
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
my opinion, spending
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lives
doing the same recursive work is an inappropriate way;
however
, this essay will explore both aspects of this discussion.

It is true that this proposition does offer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
benefits.
For instance
, if a person is doing repetitive work, the more expert level would
be achieved
in that task by that person and
as a result
on time and quality would be the outcome.
Additionally
, their
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lives
would be simpler as they do not
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have to
learn
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new
technologies and adoption towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
, which could result in a simpler happier life.
However
, despite these benefits, escaping from innovation is not the ideal solution.

In my view, welcoming these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
is a more effective way to
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live
with. A person should adopt these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
and go along with the modern inventions
as a result
connected with the modern stream would be possible.
Moreover
, this would create a population who is following
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new
trends and could accomplish any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
challenge, since it is more needed in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing countries
. I believe that these benefits have the potential to have the most profound impact on societies and individuals.

All things considered, while the same working style has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
advantages in both personal and professional level, it would be an ineffective way to handle any situation. I would advise
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should take
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new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
as a challenge and try to learn
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new
things here and there over the whole course of their
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lives
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 247

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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