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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.14

Question: Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 14
Learning a foreign language can place a huge impact on our lives. That is why many countries emphasize learning a foreign language and compel children to start earlier than other kids in other countries. In my view, children should start learning a foreign language as soon as they start school for two key reaosns. First, they will develop better language skills, as perfect as a native speaker. Children tend to be more flexible to enunciate and pronunciate correctly. I remember when I was 18, I read an article about this subject that I would never forget. I have decided to do this to my child since I was too old for it. The article had discussed a comprehensive research in which they had studied 200 seven-year-old children. The results clearly demonstrated that children have the ability of learning seven different languages when they start school. The detail of the study showed that all of those seven-year-old children developed a very impressive accent that you could never tell that they learned those languages in their classrooms. A very clear example of this fact is my girlfriend' s brother Hamid. Hamid started learning English when he started school. The school that he attended had hired a native English speaker. As a result, he is incredibly fluent in English that he started teaching English when he turned 18. As you can see, students can master a foreign language if they start learning it when they start school. Second, children would feel less pressure to learn a foreign language. Children in early ages do not worry about consequences of learning or not learning a language. They perceive it as a hobby. I remember that I started learning English when I was 23. I started learning English because I had to. Let me explain my situation better. I started dating a guy who had acceptance from the University of Harvard. I have always been so competitive, so I was determined to get an admission from that school to show him that I am as good as him, and also we could be together forever. I had such a hard time because I realized that I actually do not understand TOEFL listenings very well. All of my four skills were extremely poor. I worked so hard for two months. When I went to the exam center, I did not do very well in the reading part. I was so worried about my grade that I could not focus very well. If I had started learning English sooner, I could have confidentally go to exam. In addition to the exam anxiety that I experienced, I did not do very well at the end. I made 94 which was not enough to apply to good school. He moved to the United States in 2012 and we broke up shortly after that. This experience taught me that learning English in early ages especially when you start school can save you a lot tears and can significantly decrease the level of your stress. In conclusion, children must start learning a foreign language as early as they start school. This not only will help to master the language as a native speaker, but also it will allow them to live a live with less stress. I recommend all parents to force their kids to learn a foreign language as soon as they start their school.
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.
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many
countries emphasize
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language
and compel
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to
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earlier than other kids in other countries. In my view,
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children
should
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start
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learning
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foreign
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language
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as they
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for two key
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reaosns
.

First
, they will develop better
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language
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skills
, as perfect as a native speaker.
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Children
tend to be more flexible to enunciate and
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pronunciate
correctly
. I remember when I was 18, I read an article about this subject that I would never forget. I have decided to do this to my child since I was too
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old
for it. The article had discussed a comprehensive research in which they had studied 200 seven-year-
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old
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children
. The results
clearly
demonstrated that
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children
have the ability of
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learning
seven
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different
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languages
when they
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school
.
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The
detail of the study
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showed
that all of those seven-year-
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old
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children
developed a
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impressive accent that you could never
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tell
that they learned those
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languages
in their classrooms. A
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very
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clear
example of this fact is my
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girlfriend&
#039; s brother Hamid. Hamid
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started
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learning
English when he
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started
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school
. The
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school
that he attended had hired a native English speaker.
As a result
, he is
incredibly
fluent in English that he
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started
teaching English when he turned 18. As you can
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see
, students can master a
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foreign
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language
if they
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start
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learning
it when they
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start
school.

Second,
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children
would feel less pressure to learn a
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foreign
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language
.
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Children
in early ages do not worry about consequences of
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learning
or not
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learning
a
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language
. They perceive it as a hobby. I remember that I
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started
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learning
English when I was 23. I
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started
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learning
English
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because
I had to.
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Let
me
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explain
my situation better. I
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started
dating a guy who had acceptance from the University of Harvard. I have always been
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so
competitive,
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so
I
was determined
to
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get
an admission from that
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school
to
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show
him that I am as
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good
as him, and
also
we could be together forever.
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I
had such a
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hard
time
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because
I realized that I actually do not understand TOEFL
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listenings
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very
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well
. All of my four
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skills
were
extremely
poor. I worked
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so
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hard
for two months. When I went to the exam center, I did not do
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very
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well
in the reading part. I was
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so
worried about my grade that I could not focus
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very
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well
. If I had
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started
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learning
English sooner, I could have
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confidentally
go to exam.
In addition
to the exam anxiety that I experienced, I did not do
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very
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well
at the
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end
. I made 94 which was not
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enough
to apply to
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good
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school
. He
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moved
to the United States in
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2012 and
we broke up shortly after that. This experience taught me that
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learning
English in early ages
especially
when you
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start
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school
can save you
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a lot tears
and can
significantly
decrease the level of your
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stress
.

In conclusion
,
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children
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must
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start
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learning
a
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foreign
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language
as early as they
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school
. This not
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will
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help
to master the
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as a native speaker,
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also
it will
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them to
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a
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live
with less
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stress
. I recommend all parents to force their kids to learn a
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foreign
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language
as
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as they
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start
their
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school
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
564 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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