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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? We can learn about a person from the books and movies which this person likes. v.562

We can learn about a person from the books and movies which this person likes. v. 562
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that people have always put their efforts and bend over backward so as to get to know more and more people with various attitudes and passions in their personal lives. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether people could get to know each other by considering books and movies, they are really interested in. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that there is nothing to do with books and movies because they vary greatly. Instead, people should try to know each other by spending time. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework. To commence with, relationships do not form, materialize and maintain themselves and they are not built on a foundation of convenience, either. Generally phrased, people need to become familiar with each other in order to continue their lives successfully. By books and movies, people might not be able to know others deeply and completely. Indeed, they should try to spend most of their time with other humans in order to improve their cognitive ability. As a tangible example, in today' s hectic city of life, there is no veracity, fidelity, trustworthy, integrity, sympathy, comradeship, morale and so forth. With the absence of these hallmarks, it' s hard to get to know people by books or movies. Hardly can we become familiar deeply if we rely on books and movies. To elucidate more on this issue, people have to spend their precious time with other people, going out to a fancy restaurant, clubs, and national parks and so on, to get to know each other thoroughly. Otherwise, their relationships might not be lasting. Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance is that social media play a key role when it comes to learning about people. If we take a minute to ponder over it, vast majorities of people have now accounts in social media like Instagram, telegram, tweeter and so forth. Although they might not be able to give us complete information about people, at least we could become familiar and learn about people' s behaviors and manner. For instance, one of my close friends always posted me texts about being shrewd and diligent. So, I found that he is a shrewd person and has a hard-working attitude in doing his duties. It can be deduced from a combination of coverage and depth of detail that by social media not only can people get to know each other but also can keep in close contact and improve the circle of friendship. However, every coin has two sides. Books and movies are able to help us to know other people characteristics. Based on research conducted at the California University, people watch movies and read books according to their taste and these tastes could be about aggressiveness, horrific, veracity, compassionate and so forth. These taste could provide an opportunity for people to learn about crowds of people. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
By and large, it
is established
beyond doubt that
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people
have always put their efforts and bend over backward
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so as to
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get
to
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know
more and more
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people
with various attitudes and passions in their personal
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lives
. Various points of view which are germane to the matter
being discussed
brings us to the moot question
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as to whether
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people
could
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get
to
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know
each
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other
by considering
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books
and
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movies
, they are
really
interested in.
However
, the popular sentiment to which I
vehemently
cling is that there is nothing to do with
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books
and
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movies
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because
they vary
greatly
.
Instead
,
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people
should try to
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know
each
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other
by spending time. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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some
cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.

To commence with, relationships do not form, materialize and maintain
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themselves and
they are not built on a foundation of convenience, either.
Generally
phrased,
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people
need to become familiar with each
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other
in order to continue their
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lives
successfully
. By
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books
and
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movies
,
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people
might not be able to
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know
others
deeply
and completely.
Indeed
, they should try to spend most of their time with
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other
humans in order to
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improve
their cognitive ability. As a tangible example, in
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today&
#039; s hectic city of life, there is no veracity, fidelity, trustworthy, integrity, sympathy, comradeship, morale and
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so
forth. With the absence of these hallmarks,
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it&
#039; s
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hard
to
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get
to
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know
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people
by
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books
or
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movies
. Hardly can we become familiar
deeply
if we rely on
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books
and
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movies
. To elucidate more on this issue,
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people
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have to
spend their precious time with
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other
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people
, going out to a fancy restaurant, clubs, and national parks and
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so
on, to
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get
to
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know
each
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other
thoroughly
.
Otherwise
, their relationships might not be lasting.

Another
equally
salient point in corroborating my stance is that social media play a key role when it
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comes
to learning about
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people
. If we take a minute to ponder over it, vast majorities of
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people
have
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now
accounts in social media like Instagram, telegram, tweeter and
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so
forth. Although they might not be able to give us complete information about
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people
, at least we could become familiar and learn about
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people&
#039; s behaviors and manner.
For instance
, one of my close friends always posted me texts about being shrewd and diligent.
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So
, I found that he is a shrewd person and has a
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hard
-working attitude in doing his duties. It can
be deduced
from a combination of coverage and depth of detail that by social media not
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only
can
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people
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get
to
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know
each
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other
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but
also
can
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keep
in close contact and
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improve
the circle of friendship.

However
, every coin has two sides.
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Books
and
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movies
are able to
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help
us to
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know
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other
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people
characteristics. Based on research conducted at the California University,
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people
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watch
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movies
and read
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books
according to their taste and these tastes could be about aggressiveness, horrific, veracity, compassionate and
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so
forth. These taste could provide an opportunity for
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people
to learn about crowds of
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people
.
However
, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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IELTS essay We can learn about a person from the books and movies which this person likes. v. 562

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
549 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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