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Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.13

Question: Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 13
Childhood, one of the most precious time for human being on the earth. No, I do not agree with the statement that childhood is one of the happiest time of person' s life. In a developing country like India or other Asian countries childhood is similar to adulthood for any child. There are cases of child labor in many countries. First, In a developing countries because of less infrastructural availability and less technological growth, country' s economy is not in good condition. Three fourth of the population is living under poverty line. As poverty is widely spreaded in the society, parents send their children to work so they can earn money and their family have food to eat. For example, in a 21st century, country like India is also suffering with child labor. Parents are not well educated, so they don' t do family planning and have several kids in single family. This creates a need for child to work. Because of this hardship, child suffers from mental and physical pressure during their childhood. Moreover, resources are not available abundantly. So children belongs to common families are not able to enjoy their childhood. Some may work part time with their parents business and in free time they go to schools. From very young age children are taught that instead of wasting time in education they should help their family business. This all things ruins their innocence. Childhood is a age when children should be free from all those worries. They should be free to play, do what they like. Many research shows that childhood is the time when children can learn things very easily. Instead of learning things they are forced to work to run their family. There are cases when some orphan kids are kidnapped and put across the streets to beg by child trafficking mafias. On a contrary, In a country like America or Canada, school education is free. This developed nations give opportunity to children to grow on their own. They are independent to think on their own, what they want to do or what they want to become. The basic resources are provided to children in this countries so that they can expand their limits. There are cases in which some educated family raise their child in such a way that they can enjoy their childhood. On a concluding note, countries in which child labor still exist should work on this problem. So that childhood would not be ruined by anyone. They should be free from all the worries in their childhood.
Childhood, one of the most precious
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for human being on the earth. No, I do not
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agree
with the statement that childhood is one of the happiest
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time
of
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person&
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country
like India or other Asian
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countries
childhood is similar to adulthood for any child.

There are cases of
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child
labor in
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countries.

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, In a developing
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countries
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because
of less infrastructural availability and less technological growth,
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country&
#039; s economy is not in
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good
condition. Three fourth of the population is living under poverty line. As poverty is
widely
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spreaded
in the society, parents
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their
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children
to
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work
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so
they can earn money and their
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family
have food to eat.
For example
, in a 21st century,
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country
like India is
also
suffering with
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child
labor. Parents are not
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well educated
,
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so
they
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don&
#039; t do
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family
planning and have several kids in single
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family
. This creates a need for
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child
to
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work
.
Because of this
hardship,
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child
suffers from mental and physical pressure during their childhood.

Moreover
, resources are not available
abundantly
.
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So
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children
belongs to common
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families
are not able to enjoy their childhood.
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Some
may
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work
part
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time
with their parents business and in
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free
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time
they go to schools. From
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very
young age
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children
are taught
that
instead
of wasting
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in education they should
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help
their
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family
business. This all things ruins their innocence. Childhood is
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a
age when
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children
should be
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free
from all those worries. They should be
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free
to play, do what they like.
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Many
research
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shows
that childhood is the
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time
when
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children
can learn things
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very
easily
.
Instead
of learning things they
are forced
to
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work
to run their
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family
. There are cases when
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some
orphan kids
are kidnapped
and put across the streets to beg by
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child
trafficking mafias.

On a contrary, In a
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country
like America or Canada, school education is
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free
. This developed nations give opportunity to
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children
to grow on their
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own
. They are independent to
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think
on their
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own
, what they want to do or what they want to become. The basic resources
are provided
to
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children
in this
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countries
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so
that they can expand their limits. There are cases in which
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some
educated
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family
raise their
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child
in such a way that they can enjoy their childhood.

On a concluding note,
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countries
in which
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child
labor
still
exist should
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work
on this problem.
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So that
childhood would not
be ruined
by anyone. They should be
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free
from all the worries in their childhood.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question: Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 13

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
426 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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