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Describe the happiest person you know You should say how you know him her how he she looks like how you would describe his her character and explain why you consider him her as the happiest person you know v.1

Describe the happiest person you know You should say how you know him her how he she looks like how you would describe his her character and explain why you consider him her as the happiest person you know v. 1
In today’s modern world, everybody has the freedom to choose between different types of jobs depending upon their choices and convenience. While some individuals choose permanent jobs with security, others opt for part-time employment due to its flexibility. This essay will discuss why people should choose full-time jobs because of the security and balance they provide to employees. Nevertheless, there are many people who appreciate a sense of freedom in their work and do not want to be tied down to one job. Even though casual jobs do not offer various perks or job security, it allows an individual to experiment in multiple fields and gain valuable knowledge from these experiences. For example, people work in different casual jobs in different supermarkets and restaurants and switch from one job to another according to their need and flexibility. They also gain different experiences which will be valuable in the future. On one view, many people prefer jobs that help them gain stability in their lives which can be attained with a permanent role in an employment. The primary reason is that these kinds of jobs offer different benefits and job guarantee which gives a sense of security during the times of financial crisis or recession. Moreover, the unnecessary hassle of finding new work is also reduced and this time can be dedicated to other important aspects of life to bring work life balance. For instance, in Australia, a full-time employee must be given a month’s notice about their termination and are paid for minimum three months after their termination. Hence, I believe full-time jobs are more lucrative and suited for people who want a sense of balance and stability in their lives. To recapitulate, people will engage in some sort of employment in their lives. Even though casual jobs may seem attractive due to its freedom to work in any field and change jobs, I think full-time jobs will lure more people towards it because of the various benefits it provides, which makes them more secure in the long run. Ultimately, people want to be settled in their lives which makes permanent jobs more attractive.
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today
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different
types of
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jobs
depending upon their choices and convenience. While
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some
individuals choose permanent
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jobs
with
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security
, others opt for part-time employment due to its flexibility. This essay will discuss why
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people
should choose full-time
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jobs
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because
of the
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security
and balance they provide to employees.

Nevertheless
, there are
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many
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people
who appreciate a sense of freedom in their
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work
and do not want to
be tied
down to one
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job
.
Even though
casual
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jobs
do not offer various perks or
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job
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security
, it
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allows
an individual to experiment in multiple fields and gain valuable knowledge from these experiences.
For example
,
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people
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work
in
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different
casual
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jobs
in
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different
supermarkets and restaurants and switch from one
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job
to another according to their need and flexibility. They
also
gain
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different
experiences which will be valuable in the future.

On one view,
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many
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people
prefer
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jobs
that
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help
them gain stability in their
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lives
which can
be attained
with a permanent role in an employment. The primary reason is that these kinds of
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jobs
offer
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different
benefits and
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job
guarantee which gives a sense of
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security
during the times of financial crisis or recession.
Moreover
, the unnecessary hassle of finding new
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work
is
also
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reduced
and this time can
be dedicated
to other
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important
aspects of life to bring
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work life
balance.
For instance
, in Australia, a full-time employee
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must
be
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given
a month’s notice about their termination and
are paid
for minimum three months after their termination.
Hence
, I believe full-time
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jobs
are more lucrative and suited for
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people
who want a sense of balance and stability in their
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lives
.

To recapitulate,
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people
will engage in
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some
sort of employment in their
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lives
.
Even though
casual
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jobs
may seem attractive due to its freedom to
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work
in any field and
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change
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jobs
, I
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think
full-time
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jobs
will lure more
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people
towards it
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because
of the various benefits it provides, which
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makes
them more secure in the long run.
Ultimately
,
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people
want to
be settled
in their
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lives
which
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makes
permanent
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jobs
more attractive.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe the happiest person you know You should say how you know him her how he she looks like how you would describe his her character and explain why you consider him her as the happiest person you know v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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