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Question: Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.2

The world of today has changed drastically in the past few years. From Hong Kong to Texas, you are privileged to buy the same thing in every corner of the world. Not so long-ago people started calling themselves global citizens and that is so, due to the almost equal global development. Needless to say, this has quite a few positive consequences, but as well as a few negative ones. To start with the positives, one of the most important advantages of the globalization of goods is the equality of the consumers. People are permitted to buy the same thing in their homeland as their fellow travelers abroad, and thus discrimination will be abolished over time. An example, for instance, is the following situation: instead of traveling and spending tons of money to go to Belgium and buy Belgium chocolate, you can do that wherever you are in the nearby supermarket. Equality is crucial for the social and economic development of every country. Another positive feature of the fact that countries are becoming more and more similar is the lack of anxiety for newcomers, or else said the travelers. The opportunity to find similar products around the world can make you feel less homesick and diminish your adaptation period. I have experienced that myself while living in Cairo for four years. Naturally, as an Arabic country, Egypt does not at all have the same products offered as here in Bulgaria, and as a result, this can make you feel anxious, especially in the beginning. I remember very well how I used to come back and, as a small child in a candy shop, buy everything I have missed. Naturally, there are some negative consequences as well. One of the biggest ones is the loss of cultural identity and the charming uniqueness of every country. When visiting Lebanon, for example, you will be looking for the not so infamous shawarma. And yet you can find it in every other country around Europe in not one or two places. Therefore, is it necessary to travel all that distance to see or eat something? Well, of course it is, because it’s not about just eating, it’s an emotional roller coaster of experiences. No matter how similar countries will become there will never be a second France or India. In conclusion, countries are indeed becoming very similar and globalization is in full swing. No doubt, there are some negative effects of that, such as the loss of cultural identity and uniqueness. However, the positives sure outweigh them, as for example the equality between buyers and the reduced homesickness of newcomers. In my opinion, goods should be traded all over the world, as along with the other advantages, this will strengthen the economy and the diplomatic relationships between countries and make the Earth a global home.
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changed
drastically
in the past few years. From Hong Kong to Texas, you
are privileged
to
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buy
the same thing in every corner of the
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world
. Not
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long-ago
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started
calling themselves global citizens and
that is
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so
, due to the almost equal global development. Needless to say, this has quite a few
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positive
consequences,
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but
as
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as a few
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negative
ones.

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start
with the
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positives
, one of the most
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important
advantages of the globalization of
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goods
is the equality of the consumers.
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People
are permitted
to
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buy
the same thing in their homeland as their fellow travelers abroad, and
thus
discrimination will
be abolished
over time. An example,
for instance
, is the following situation:
instead
of traveling and spending tons of money to go to Belgium and
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buy
Belgium chocolate, you can do that wherever you are in the nearby supermarket. Equality is crucial for the social and economic development of every country.

Another
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positive
feature of the fact that
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countries
are becoming more and more
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similar
is the lack of anxiety for newcomers, or else said the travelers. The opportunity to find
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similar
products around the
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world
can
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make
you feel less homesick and diminish your adaptation period. I have experienced that myself while living in Cairo for four years.
Naturally
, as an Arabic
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country
, Egypt does not at all have the same products offered as here in Bulgaria, and
as a result
, this can
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make
you feel anxious,
especially
in the beginning. I remember
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very
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well
how I
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used
to
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come
back and, as a
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small
child in a candy shop,
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buy
everything I have missed.

Naturally
, there are
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some
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negative
consequences as
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well
. One of the biggest ones is the loss of cultural identity and the charming uniqueness of every
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country
. When visiting Lebanon,
for example
, you will be looking for the not
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so
infamous shawarma. And
yet
you can find it in every other
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country
around Europe in not one or two places.
Therefore
, is it necessary to travel all that distance to
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see
or eat something?
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Well
,
of course
it is,
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because
it’s not about
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just
eating, it’s an emotional roller coaster of experiences. No matter how
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similar
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countries
will become there will never be a second France or India.

In conclusion
,
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countries
are
indeed
becoming
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very
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similar
and globalization is in full swing. No doubt, there are
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some
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negative
effects of that, such as the loss of cultural identity and uniqueness.
However
, the
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positives
sure outweigh them, as
for example
the equality between buyers and the
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reduced
homesickness of newcomers. In my opinion,
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goods
should
be traded
all over the
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world
, as along with the other advantages, this will strengthen the economy and the diplomatic relationships between
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countries
and
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make
the Earth a global home.
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IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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