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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. with this statement? v. 3
The wealth of a nation is its people. Even in this twenty-first century millions of people living in poor nations do not have access to health care facilities or education. Since their governments lack the financial means to improve their living standards, some people feel that the rich nations should help them by providing financial aid. I agree with this argument. In my opinion when rich nations help poor nations, it is a win-win situation for both. Firstly rich nations have excess funds. By giving financial aid to poor nations, they can improve the living standards in the third-world. Poverty is the root cause of many social evils. It is a well-known fact that poor countries are the breeding grounds of several anti-social elements. The poor, in general, are unhappy with their own lives. They are also angry with the rich. Needless to say, many of them have criminal tendencies. It is not possible to reform them without improving their living standards. By providing financial assistance to poor nations, the rich countries can alleviate poverty in those nations and make the world a more peaceful place to live in. Secondly, providing financial assistance to poor nations makes excellent business sense too. When poor nations develop, the purchasing power of their people will increase. This provides a great opportunity for rich nations that are also the hub of manufacturing. By helping the poor grow, they can increase their wealth too. To conclude, when rich nations give financial assistance to poor nations, they are not only being generous but also helping their own industries and people. Irrespective of our gender, nationality or religion, everyone deserves access to good food, health and education. Therefore, in my opinion, nations that have excess funds should use them for the betterment of poor nations. After all, we all belong to the family of humanity.
The wealth of a
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nation
is its
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. Even in this twenty-
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century millions of
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people
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living
in
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poor
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nations
do not have access to health care facilities or education. Since their
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governments
lack the
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financial
means to
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improve
their
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living
standards,
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some
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people
feel that the
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rich
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nations
should
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help
them by providing
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financial
aid. I
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agree
with this argument. In my opinion when
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rich
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nations
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help
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poor
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, it is a win-win situation for both.

Firstly
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rich
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nations
have excess funds. By giving
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financial
aid to
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poor
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nations
, they can
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improve
the
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living
standards in the third-world. Poverty is the root cause of
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many
social evils.
It is a well-known fact that
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poor
countries are the breeding grounds of several anti-social elements. The
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poor
,
in general
, are unhappy with their
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own
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lives
. They are
also
angry with the
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rich
. Needless to say,
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many
of them have criminal tendencies. It is not possible to reform them without improving their
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living
standards. By providing
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financial
assistance to
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poor
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nations
, the
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rich
countries can alleviate poverty in those
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nations
and
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make
the world a more peaceful place to
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live
in.

Secondly
, providing
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financial
assistance to
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poor
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nations
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makes
excellent business sense too. When
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poor
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nations
develop, the purchasing power of their
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people
will increase. This provides a great opportunity for
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rich
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nations
that are
also
the hub of manufacturing. By helping the
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poor
grow, they can increase their wealth too.

To conclude
, when
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rich
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nations
give
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financial
assistance to
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poor
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nations
, they are not
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only
being generous
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but
also
helping their
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own
industries and
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people
. Irrespective of our gender, nationality or religion, everyone deserves access to
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good
food, health and education.
Therefore
, in my opinion,
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nations
that have excess funds should
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use
them for the betterment of
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poor
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nations
.
After all
, we all belong to the family of humanity.
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49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
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4 paragraphs
308 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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