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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life. v.3

Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life. v. 3
There are a number of students fail in schools, but it does not mean that they will not be successful in life. I actually agree that failing in school, it is not end of life. I tend to believe that individuals have different interests from person to another. However, if we failed in academic fields, it does not mean that we will fail in our professional life. So based on real stories, we saw a lot of people got success in the professional life rather than academic directions. As a result, we cannot say that education is the one which it judges our destiny. For example, in recent real stories of persons around the world, we recognize that most of the actors have not completed their education, and they become an asset in the art world, as they gain money triple times compared to individuals who finished education backgrounds. For the mentioned above, life will not stop for education only, so people continue up their life naturally. But there must be kind of ambitious aspect available in them. Hence, they must not feel disappointed, if they did not success in academic sides. There are a number of student left school at an early age, because they do not have the desire for education. For example, I know one person his name was Khaled, who was born in Jordan, he stopped going to school, because he liked working since he was a child. Notable, his father was handling his own business in a small shop selling grocery items, as he was taking his son to his shop to help him in managing the store. So, Khaled liked working with customers and help them to select the best products for the customers as he tried to make a smile in the face of each customer visiting the shop. Suddenly, his father died due to critical health condition. Now, he handled the store instead of his late father. In addition, since he controlled the store by himself, he thought of other ways to expand his business, as a result, he offered a good to his next neighbour's shop, it went successfully, he won the deal, and bought, after he opened both shops all together, as a consequence, he got more customers, and his sales were increased dramatically. Currently, he opened a new company in Jordan deal with import and export items from other countries. In addition, he has one of the best malls. In brief, I tend to believe that education is not the only way to success life, as people have different interests in life, if they could not success in academics, they would have succeeded in professional life.
There are a number of students fail in
schools
,
but
it does not mean that they will not be successful in
life
. I actually
agree
that failing in
school
, it is not
end
of life.

I tend to believe that individuals have
different
interests from person to another.
However
, if we failed in
academic
fields, it does not mean that we will fail in our professional
life
.
So
based on real stories, we
saw
a lot of
people
got
success
in the professional
life
rather
than
academic
directions.
As a result
, we cannot say that
education
is the one which it judges our destiny.
For example
, in recent real stories of persons around the world, we recognize that most of the actors have not completed their
education
, and they become an asset in the art world, as they gain money triple times compared to individuals who finished
education
backgrounds.

For the mentioned above,
life
will not
stop
for
education
only
,
so
people
continue up their
life
naturally
.
But
there
must
be kind of ambitious aspect available in them.
Hence
, they
must
not feel disappointed, if they did not
success
in
academic
sides. There are a number of student
left
school
at an early age,
because
they do not have the desire for
education
.
For example
, I know one person his name
was Khaled
, who
was born
in Jordan, he
stopped
going to
school
,
because
he liked working since he was a child. Notable, his father was handling his
own
business in a
small
shop
selling grocery items, as he was taking his son to his
shop
to
help
him in managing the store.
So
, Khaled liked working with
customers
and
help
them to select the best products for the
customers
as he tried to
make
a smile in the face of each
customer
visiting the
shop
.
Suddenly
, his father
died
due to critical health condition.
Now
, he handled the store
instead
of his late father.

In addition
, since he controlled the store by himself, he
thought
of other ways to expand his business,
as a result
, he offered a
good
to his
next
neighbour
's
shop
, it went
successfully
, he won the deal, and
bought
, after he opened both
shops
all together, as a consequence, he
got
more
customers
, and his sales
were increased
dramatically
.
Currently
, he opened a new
company
in Jordan deal with import and export items from other countries.
In addition
, he has one of the best malls.

In brief
, I tend to believe that
education
is not the
only
way to
success
life
, as
people
have
different
interests in
life
, if they could not
success
in
academics
, they would have succeeded in professional
life
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
447 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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