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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.2

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 2
The process in which people, ideas, technology and goods spread throughout the world in order to develop more interaction between the world’s cultures, governments, and economies is called globalization. In my opinion, globalization is playing a beneficial role in the development of the whole world. (44) In ancient times, people had a very simple life. They had limited resources and poor means of communication. Therefore, international trade and interaction with the external world was very rare in many parts of the world at that time. At present, the lifestyle of people is greatly changed across the world due to huge advancement in Science and Technology. Nowadays, the availability of international brands in any country has enabled consumers to purchase similar quality products. (77) The recent development in telecommunication sector has made business very reliable and fast. The invention of cell phone has brought people in close contact. The modern internet facility has enabled people to buy any product online from any part of the world. Thus, the multinational companies have to use the latest technology in order to facilitate the clients in purchasing similar goods while sitting in any part of the world. If the flame of globalization keeps on spreading, then the entire world will certainly become a global village in near future. (91) In my opinion, globalization has given birth to similar way of life in different regions of the world. It has not only reduced the gaps and conflicts between different countries but also has made life far luxurious and more comfortable than in the past. (44)
The process in which
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people
,
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ideas
, technology and
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goods
spread throughout the
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world
in order to develop more interaction between the
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world’s
cultures,
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governments
, and economies
is called
globalization. In my opinion, globalization is playing a beneficial role in the development of the whole
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world
. (44)

In ancient times,
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people
had a
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very
simple life. They had limited resources and poor means of communication.
Therefore
, international trade and interaction with the external
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world
was
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very
rare in
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many
parts of the
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world
at that time. At present, the lifestyle of
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people
is
greatly
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changed
across the
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world
due to huge advancement in Science and Technology. Nowadays, the availability of international brands in any country has enabled consumers to
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purchase
similar quality products. (77)

The recent development in telecommunication sector has made business
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very
reliable and
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fast
. The invention of cell phone has brought
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people
in close contact.
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The
modern internet facility has enabled
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people
to
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buy
any product online from any part of the
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world
.
Thus
, the multinational
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companies
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have to
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use
the latest technology in order to facilitate the clients in purchasing similar
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goods
while sitting in any part of the
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world
. If the flame of globalization
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keeps
on spreading, then the entire
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world
will
certainly
become a global village in near future. (91)

In my opinion, globalization has
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given
birth to similar way of life in
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different
regions of the
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world
. It has not
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only
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reduced
the gaps and conflicts between
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different
countries
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but
also
has made life far luxurious and more comfortable than in the past. (44)
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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