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Agree/disagree with airlines that tax their tickets? v.1

Agree/disagree with airlines that tax their tickets? v. 1
Nowadays, taxing airlines has become a hotly debated that divides all travel decision makers in two sides. From one hand, some specialists assume tourism as a revenue generating source & taxing their flight tickets will tend to produce higher growth income. From the other hand, some others think theses charges that increase ticket prices which would negatively impact their ticket sales. This essay is going to consider the both views of the arguments. From one point, countries that are considered to be tourist traps, and people tend to visit due to the tourist attractions it contain like Italy, Germany, etc. , those countries can benefit from this advantage by levying taxes on airline travelers who are willing to pay any money to watch the tremendous views there. Thus, they consider it as an important source of income. From another point, some other countries may lack these natural views & may not be a tourist destination, but they try to create a competitive advantages in its prices. For instance, turkey has recently become one of the top tourist destinations in the world. Although it does not contain many unique places like others, but it has brilliantly achieved a competitive advantage in travel costs. So, it is remarkable of its low cost travels not also its hotel costs, but also its airline costs. Hence, these countries` policies will assume non taxing in order to attract their clients. In a nutshell, since taxation is a way of price increase, market conditions is the only determiner. In other words, the more demand on tickets increase & travelers are inelastic to prices, the more the governments will be willing to charge taxes & the vice versa.
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hotly
debated that divides all travel decision makers in two sides. From one hand,
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some
specialists assume tourism as a revenue generating source & taxing their flight
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tickets
will tend to produce higher growth income. From the
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other
hand,
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some
others
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think
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theses
charges that increase
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ticket
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prices
which would
negatively
impact their
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ticket
sales. This essay is going to consider the both views of the arguments.

From one point,
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countries
that
are considered
to be
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tourist
traps, and
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people
tend to visit due to the
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tourist
attractions it
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contain
like Italy, Germany, etc.
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,
those
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countries
can benefit from this advantage by levying taxes on airline travelers who are willing to pay any money to
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watch
the tremendous views there.
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, they consider it as an
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important
source of income.

From another point,
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some
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other
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countries
may lack these natural views & may not be a
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tourist
destination,
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but
they try to create a competitive
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advantages
in its
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.
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, turkey has recently become one of the top
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tourist
destinations in the world. Although it does not contain
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many
unique places like others,
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but
it has
brilliantly
achieved a competitive advantage in travel
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costs
.
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, it is remarkable of its low
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travels not
also
its hotel
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costs
,
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but
also
its airline
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costs
.
Hence
, these
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countries`
policies will assume
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non taxing
in order to attract their clients.

In a nutshell, since taxation is a way of
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price
increase, market conditions is the
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only
determiner. In
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other
words, the more demand on
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tickets
increase & travelers are inelastic to
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prices
, the more the
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governments
will be willing to charge taxes & the vice versa.
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IELTS essay Agree/disagree with airlines that tax their tickets? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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