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Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents’ generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v.1

Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents’ generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v. 1
It is argued by many that e-books are the solution for paper-free education. I agree with this notion and consider modern as well as effective teaching technique a major advantage to it, whereas addiction to electronic devices like mobile and laptops to be a principal disadvantage. Nowadays, many institutions are moving towards a paperless approach to education with the help of modern-day technology like e-books. Firstly, it saves tons of paper as there is no more need to print millions of books, which helps prevent deforestation and save the environment. Secondly, since the content of those books is now available digitally, it is very compact and easy to use on electronic devices like mobiles and laptops. In other words, The students now don't need to carry those heavy books everywhere, instead, they can use it when and wherever they want on their mobile phones. For instance, Amazon has already begun converting traditional paper books to e-books due to its increasing popularity and easy use. On the other hand, it poses the threat of the growth of addiction towards the use of these electronic devices among the students. Since the books will then only be available digitally, the several hours spent in front of these devices will increase much, which may in turn damage the visibility of young children, leading them to the use of spectacles. In addition, some students may find it difficult to study on mobile phones as they may get distracted to social media. Take such as, when I read an article on the internet, some social media notification pops-up resulting in distraction. In conclusion, even though e-books may accelerate addiction to mobile phones, I believe there are greater advantages to it such as environmentally friendly and ease of use.
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is argued
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many
that e-books are the solution for paper-free education. I
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agree
with this notion and consider modern
as well
as effective teaching technique a major advantage to it, whereas addiction to electronic
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devices
like mobile and laptops to be a principal disadvantage.

Nowadays,
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many
institutions are moving towards a paperless approach to education with the
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help
of modern-day technology like e-books.
Firstly
, it saves tons of paper as there is no more need to print millions of
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books
, which
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helps
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prevent
deforestation and save the environment.
Secondly
, since the content of those
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books
is
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now
available
digitally
, it is
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very
compact and easy to
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use
on electronic
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devices
like mobiles and laptops.
In other words
, The students
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now
don't need to carry those heavy
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books
everywhere,
instead
, they can
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use
it when and wherever they want on their mobile phones.
For instance
, Amazon has already begun converting traditional paper
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books
to e-books due to its increasing popularity and easy
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use
.

On the other hand
, it poses the threat of the growth of addiction towards the
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use
of these electronic
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devices
among the students. Since the
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books
will then
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only
be available
digitally
, the several hours spent in front of these
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devices
will increase much, which may in turn damage the visibility of young children, leading them to the
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use
of spectacles.
In addition
,
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some
students may find it difficult to study on mobile phones as they may
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get
distracted to social media. Take such as, when I read an article on the internet,
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some
social media notification pops-up resulting in distraction.

In conclusion
,
even though
e-books may accelerate addiction to mobile phones, I believe there are greater advantages to it such as
environmentally
friendly and
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ease
of
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use
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents’ generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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