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Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to shut off its heating systems after 5 pm. The woman is against this. v.1

Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to shut off its heating systems after 5 pm. The woman is against this. v. 1
For many years in the education system, the traditional teaching method - teachers make a speech in the auditorium and learners go to class to study has become a major force of studying. But nowadays, it is old-fashioned as the cutting-edge technology has been widely introduced. In lieu of, enriching the knowledge on websites is much more popular. In my opinion, I would send my disagreement if someone claimed for the outweigh of online courses and wanted to have everything done on it, and here are some reasons. In terms of online courses, nowadays these are becoming more and more general thanks to its great convenience and flexibility which support users in different purposes. Firstly, those provides us the flexible timelines, which really suitable for people whose busy-schedule enough to enjoy the face to face classes. Secondly, not only it satisfies the learners, but also the tutors as they could make the best use of these technological systems of recording and posting the lectures on their own website or channel. At the same time, students who have missed the class for some poor reasons would be able to join and recap it later. No one can deny all the mentioned advantages of studying online. But I believe it is better to get ourselves to the traditional classes. Whenever the teachers deliver the lectures, at any point in the time the students are allowed to make the questions and the answers would be classified immediately instead of waiting for the answer email might slow down and interrupt their ideas. Consequently, the quality of the lectures is completely enhanced. What's more, while online courses are only suitable for those learners who have strong self-discipline and focus ability, conventional classroom is the best selection for everyone without exception as they get the school to manage. Considering the aforementioned, I am still supportive of the conventional studying initiative. Gathering knowledge via monitor does not work effectively on giving instructions and it might retard the ability to comprehend the lessons directly.
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many
years in the education system, the traditional teaching method
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teachers
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make
a speech in the auditorium and learners go to
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class
to study has become a major force of studying.
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But
nowadays, it is
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old
-fashioned as the cutting-edge technology has been
widely
introduced. In lieu of, enriching the knowledge on websites is much more popular. In my opinion, I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
my disagreement if someone claimed for
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the outweigh
of
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online
courses and wanted to have everything done on it, and here are
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some
reasons.

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In
terms of
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online
courses, nowadays these are becoming more and more general thanks to its great convenience and flexibility which support users in
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different
purposes.
Firstly
,
The verb 'provides' is singular. Did you mean: "This provides" or "those provide"?
those provides
us the flexible timelines, which
really
suitable for
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people
whose busy-schedule
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enough
to enjoy the face to face
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classes
.
Secondly
, not
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only
it satisfies the learners,
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but
also
the tutors as they could
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make
the best
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use
of these technological systems of recording and posting the lectures on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
website or channel. At the same time, students who have missed the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
for
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some
poor reasons would be able to
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join
and recap it later.

No one can deny all the mentioned advantages of studying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
I believe it is better to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
ourselves to the traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
. Whenever the teachers deliver the lectures, at any point in the time the students are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the questions and the answers would
be classified
immediately
instead
of waiting for the answer email might slow down and interrupt their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.
Consequently
, the quality of the lectures is completely enhanced. What's more, while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
courses are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
suitable for those learners who have strong self-discipline and focus ability, conventional classroom is the best selection for everyone without exception as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the school to manage.

Considering the aforementioned, I am
still
supportive of the conventional studying initiative. Gathering knowledge via monitor does not work
effectively
on giving instructions and it might retard the ability to comprehend the lessons
directly
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to shut off its heating systems after 5 pm. The woman is against this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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