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Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to have sign-up sheet for accessing its computer lab and have limited 1hr access to its computer lab. The woman is against this. v.1

Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to have sign-up sheet for accessing its computer lab and have limited 1hr access to its computer lab. The woman is against this. v. 1
These days individuals are suffering from stress-related illnesses and this issue have become one of the widespread problems. This essay will introduce with causes and solutions for this problem. From my own experience, I have met numerous teenagers who are fighting with their stressful behaviour. The school, early-relationships and probably family impact cause most of these problems. For instance, the young generation of our time tends to be grumpy and behave immaturely. Consequently, this may lead to serious arguments and misunderstandings between kids at school. If parents take the upbringing of their children under the spotlight, then kids will feel their support and will not suffer from stress anymore. However, adults face this problem more often. For example, almost every adult has own job and family. Therefore, it causes some difficulties to combine them. If they spend more time working on trying to improve their life, then the possibility of problems in their family is high and vice versa. To avoid stress in this situation, it is essential to remember that everybody deal with similar issues and keep the patience. To conclude, all of this above, I hope that stress-related illnesses will slightly decrease. As a solution for this problem I would suggest residents not to be exposed under the stress, lead an active way of life and as it is obvious, stay calm. On the other hand, it is better to tackle such a diseases with professional psychologists
These days individuals are suffering from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
-related illnesses and this issue have become one of the widespread
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
. This essay will introduce with causes and solutions for this problem.

From my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
experience, I have met numerous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
who are fighting with their stressful
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
. The school, early-relationships and
probably
family impact cause most of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
.
For instance
, the young generation of our time tends to be grumpy and behave
immaturely
.
Consequently
, this may lead to serious arguments and misunderstandings between kids at school. If parents take the upbringing of their children under the spotlight, then kids will feel their support and will not suffer from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
anymore.

However
, adults face this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
.
For example
, almost every adult has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
job and family.
Therefore
, it causes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
difficulties to combine them. If they spend more time working on trying to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their life, then the possibility of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
in their family is high and vice versa. To avoid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
in this situation, it is essential to remember that everybody deal with similar issues and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the patience.

To conclude
, all of this above, I hope that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
-related illnesses will
slightly
decrease. As a solution for this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
I would suggest residents not to
be exposed
under the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
, lead an active way of life and as it is obvious, stay calm.
On the other hand
, it is better to tackle such
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a disease" or simply "diseases"?
a diseases
with professional
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
psychologists
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question 3: 60 secondsThe university plans to have sign-up sheet for accessing its computer lab and have limited 1hr access to its computer lab. The woman is against this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
238 words
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6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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