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Question 2Some people like to shop in large grocery stores and department stores. Other people prefer to shop in small specialty stores or shops. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v.1

Question 2Some people like to shop in large grocery stores and department stores. Other people prefer to shop in small specialty stores or shops. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1
For some time now, there has been a sudden increase in the number of overweight people, which has put the health care professionals, deployed to treat these people, to test. While a portion of the populace believes that the schools should give physical agility lessons to the students to fight this menace, others completely wipe off this idea. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and why I strongly believe that remaining physically fit is the foundation for living a longer and healthier life. Imparting physical robustness lectures to children is the need of the hour in today's world filled with stress and other health related issues. This will raise awareness among them since a very small age about the benefits of keeping the body fit. For instance, teaching a child what to eat, when to sleep, perks of playing and running on the play field can play a vital role in shaping his mind and body for future life. It is for these reasons why fitness lessons should be a mandate in schools. On the other hand, there are still many people who don't believe in the opinion of giving fitness lessons and find it completely preposterous. These people think that this can divert a child's focus from his studies which can be detrimental for his academic performance. To support this, many parents believe that the time devoted by the child in doing physical stuff should be invested in studying as this is not the correct age for youngsters to contemplate about their physical well being. These are the supporting facts which have bolstered the beliefs of these people about the needlessness of the physical education. To sum things up, medical centres have long been pressurized by the rise in the number of overweight citizens. This essay discussed why some people are in favour of fitness lessons in the schools, while others are not. In my opinion, I firmly believe that it must be an endeavour of the educational institutions to encourage students to adopt a healthier lifestyle by providing them the right guidance.
For
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time
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, there has been a sudden increase in the number of overweight
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people
, which has put the health care professionals, deployed to treat these
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people
, to
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test
. While a portion of the populace
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believes
that the schools should give
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physical
agility
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lessons
to the students to fight this menace, others completely wipe off this
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idea
. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument and why I
strongly
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believe
that remaining
physically
fit is the foundation for living a longer and healthier life.

Imparting
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physical
robustness lectures to children is the need of the hour in
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today
's world filled with
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stress
and
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other
health related issues. This will raise awareness among them since a
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very
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small
age about the benefits of keeping the body fit.
For instance
, teaching a child what to eat, when to sleep, perks of playing and running on the play field can play a vital role in shaping his mind and body for future life. It is for these reasons why fitness
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lessons
should be a mandate in schools.

On the
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other
hand, there are
still
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many
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people
who don't
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believe
in the opinion of giving fitness
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lessons
and find it completely preposterous. These
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people
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think
that this can divert a child's focus from his studies which can be detrimental for his academic performance. To support this,
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many
parents
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believe
that the time devoted by the child in doing
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physical
stuff should
be invested
in studying as this is not the correct age for youngsters to contemplate about their
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physical
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well being
. These are the supporting facts which have bolstered the beliefs of these
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people
about the needlessness of the
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physical
education.

To sum things up, medical
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centres
have long
been pressurized
by the rise in the number of overweight citizens. This essay discussed why
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some
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people
are in
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favour
of fitness
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lessons
in the schools, while others are not. In my opinion, I
firmly
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believe
that it
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must
be an
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endeavour
of the educational institutions to encourage students to adopt a healthier lifestyle by providing them the right guidance.
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IELTS essay Question 2Some people like to shop in large grocery stores and department stores. Other people prefer to shop in small specialty stores or shops. Which do you prefer? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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