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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: • Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y v.1

After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: • Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y v. 1
Pictures are replacing a thousand words. Therefore, thanks to modern technology news sharing with a picture or video are easy accessible and standard. Apart from that, stories on the TV and newspapers cannot be imagined without visualized materials. In this essay I will explain why in my opinion is important to see photos as part of the information. Many people think that pictures are an essential part of each news in a nowadays. As an example, we can see top sold magazines and newspapers are fully covered with great photos and illustration as support for the story. Although, according to the my working experience in the newspaper house, and my direct contact with a many of the readers, they confirmed that they more often just looked first at the pictures to decide if they will read or not a news. On the other side, if we are looking TV houses which all top stories cover within a video material or live reporting what increasing more visitors on their channel. As an example, let us take look how many will drop reading if a news presenter will talk about story without the supports of the real videos. Finally, this type of the reporters presentation will equal as they listen radio instead of television. As a conclusion, humans in the nowadays cannot imagine any newspapers or TV channels without real photographs or documentary materials. However, more people share the opinion that pictures are more valuable than any words. Taking everything into consideration, I am standing on my opinion that bad picture explaining more than the best written story.
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Pictures
are replacing a thousand words.
Therefore
, thanks to modern technology news sharing with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picture
or video are easy accessible and standard. Apart from that,
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stories
on the TV and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
cannot
be imagined
without visualized materials. In this essay I will
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explain
why in my opinion is
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important
to
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see
photos as part of the information.

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Many
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people
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think
that
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pictures
are an essential part of each news in a nowadays.

As an example, we can
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see
top sold magazines and
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newspapers
are
fully
covered with great photos and illustration as support for the
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story
. Although, according to
A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "my working" or "the working"?
the my working
experience in the
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newspaper
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house
, and my direct contact with a
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many
of the readers, they confirmed that they more
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often
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just
looked
first
at the
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pictures
to decide if they will read or not
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a news
.

On the other side, if we are
Did you mean "watching"?
looking
TV
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houses
which all top
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stories
cover within a video material or
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live
reporting what increasing more visitors on their channel. As an example,
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let
us take look how
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many
will drop reading if a news presenter will talk about
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story
without the supports of the real videos.
Finally
, this type of the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "reporters'" or "reporter's"?
reporters
presentation will equal as they listen radio
instead
of television.

As a conclusion, humans in the nowadays cannot imagine any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
or TV channels without real photographs or documentary materials.
However
, more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
share the opinion that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pictures
are more valuable than any words. Taking everything into consideration, I am standing on my opinion that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
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picture
explaining more than the best written
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story
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department. Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention: • Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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