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Que: Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Que: Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. with this statement? v. 1
Environmental issues are now too huge a problem for individuals and nations to tackle on their own. It has been suggested that international cooperation remains the only route to fight these problems. In as much as I agree that nations need to come together to put an end to these issues, I do not think that it is the only means to solving the problems. Admittedly, collaboration among the different countries of the world is an effective way of combating the menace. This is because global warming, which has resulted from emission of green house gases and depletion of the ozone layer, has cut across the entire globe. Therefore, to forestall this occurrence, all hands need to be on deck to protect the environment. For example, the United Nations organization has called for a forum among all key leaders of the world to reach a consensus and commit themselves on how to save the ozone layer from further depletion by substituting fossil fuels with alternative energy sources. However, as the need arises for nations to join hands together to save the planet from further damage, individuals also need to play their roles. For instance, people can opt for fuel efficient vehicles and power saving household devices to save fuel consumption and eventual fuel combustion which will collectively lessen greenhouse gases production. Furthermore, in a bid to reduce their contribution to pollution, countries on their own can put up policies and legislation against the enormous utilisation of non renewable energy by local industries. Besides this, they can put up measures to control traffic and lessen vehicular queueing on the roads so as to make the air cleaner. In conclusion, while I support that protection of the environment will improve when the world comes together, personal efforts by people and the different governments are also needed to save the planet from further degradation.
Environmental issues are
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now
too huge a problem for individuals and
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nations
to tackle on their
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own
. It has
been suggested
that international cooperation remains the
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only
route to fight these problems. In as much as I
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agree
that
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nations
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need
to
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come
together to put an
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end
to these issues, I do not
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think
that it is the
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only
means to solving the problems.

Admittedly
, collaboration among the
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different
countries of the world is an effective way of combating the menace. This is
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because
global warming, which has resulted from emission of green
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house
gases and depletion of the ozone layer, has
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cut
across the entire globe.
Therefore
, to forestall this occurrence, all hands
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need
to be on deck to protect the environment.
For example
, the United
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Nations
organization has called for a forum among all key leaders of the world to reach a consensus and commit themselves on how to
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save
the ozone layer from
further
depletion by substituting fossil
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fuels
with alternative energy sources.

However
, as the
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need
arises for
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nations
to
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join
hands together to
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save
the planet from
further
damage, individuals
also
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need
to play their roles.
For instance
,
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people
can opt for
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fuel
efficient vehicles and power saving household devices to
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save
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fuel
consumption and eventual
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fuel
combustion which will
collectively
lessen greenhouse gases production.
Furthermore
, in a bid to
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reduce
their contribution to pollution, countries on their
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own
can put up policies and legislation against the enormous
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utilisation
of
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non renewable
energy by local industries.
Besides
this, they can put up measures to control traffic and lessen vehicular
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queueing
on the roads
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so as to
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make
the air cleaner.

In conclusion
, while I support that protection of the environment will
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improve
when the world
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comes
together, personal efforts by
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people
and the
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different
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governments
are
also
needed to
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save
the planet from
further
degradation.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Que: Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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