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Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with v.2

Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. with v. 2
Climate change is a phenomenon affecting all people in all walks of life, from individual citizens to whole countries and huge multinational companies. Therefore, I disagree with the notion that the only way to address the environmental problems is at international level. I firmly believe that this colossal problem can only be handled if all individuals contribute; all governments take steps at national as well as international level. Many steps can be taken at the national and international level. By imposing restrictions on emissions and by strictly monitoring waste disposal from factories, plants and businesses, governments would go a long way towards preventing climate change. Furthermore, governments around the world should come up with solutions to help prevent imminent environmental disaster. The Kyoto Agreement in the 1990s tried to create international consensus to limit industrial emissions of gases. Many countries which are part of United Nations signed this agreement according to which they would not allow any industries to be set up which emitted more than 5. 2% carbon dioxide. Some people claim that individual action is irrelevant in the face of massive, wide-scale prevention policies set and controlled by governments. On the other hand, it is also a fact that individual combined with governmental action can do a lot more to prevent climate change than if individual citizens were not involved. In a world of six billion people, if everyone stopped wasting water, disposed of their rubbish properly, started accepting recycled material and stopped succumbing to consumerism then it would go a long way in solving the problem of environment. In conclusion, I suppose that individual citizens cannot sit back and say it is someone else’s responsibility to protect the environment; we must all play our part - individual citizens and governments at the national and international level.
Climate
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change
is a phenomenon affecting all
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people
in all walks of life, from
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individual
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citizens
to whole countries and huge multinational
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companies
.
Therefore
, I disagree with the notion that the
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only
way to address the environmental problems is at
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international
level. I
firmly
believe that this colossal problem can
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only
be handled
if all
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individuals
contribute; all
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governments
take steps at national
as well
as
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international
level.

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Many
steps can
be taken
at the national and
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international
level. By imposing restrictions on emissions and by
strictly
monitoring waste disposal from factories, plants and businesses,
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governments
would go a long way towards preventing climate
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change
.
Furthermore
,
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governments
around the world should
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come
up with solutions to
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help
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prevent
imminent environmental disaster. The Kyoto Agreement in the 1990s tried to create
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international
consensus to limit industrial emissions of gases.
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Many
countries which are part of United Nations signed this agreement according to which they would not
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allow
any industries to
be set
up which emitted more than 5. 2% carbon dioxide.

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Some
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people
claim that
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individual
action is irrelevant in the face of massive, wide-scale prevention policies set and controlled by
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governments
.
On the other hand
, it is
also
a fact that
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individual
combined with governmental action can do a lot more to
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prevent
climate
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change
than if
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individual
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citizens
were not involved. In a world of six billion
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people
, if everyone
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stopped
wasting water, disposed of their rubbish
properly
,
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started
accepting recycled material and
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stopped
succumbing to consumerism then it would go a long way in solving the problem of environment.

In conclusion
, I suppose that
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individual
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citizens
cannot sit back and say it is someone else’s responsibility to protect the environment; we
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must
all play our part
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-
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individual
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citizens
and
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governments
at the national and
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international
level.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. with v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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