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Environmental problem are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with t v.2

Environmental problem are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. with t v. 2
Climate change is a phenomenon affecting all people in all walks of life, from individual citizens to whole countries and huge multinational companies. Therefore, I disagree with the notion that the only way to address the environmental problems is at international level. I firmly believe that this colossal problem can only be handled if all individuals contribute; all governments take steps at national level and also join hands at an international level. Undoubtedly, gigantic steps need to be taken, and are being taken at the international level. The ‘COP21’ in Paris in November 2015 is a step in this direction. The aim of ‘COP21’ is well known: to reach a universal agreement limiting the rise in global average temperature to 2°C above pre-industrial levels. All nations are realizing that climate change is one of the greatest challenges faced by mankind today. Many steps can be taken at the national level. Governments can aware people of the benefits of using energy efficient devices. For instance, this year government of India gave 2 LED bulbs to each government employee at Rs 10/- each under the “Prakash Path” scheme. The cost of each bulb is Rs 400/-. The cost will be recovered by adding a very small amount in each month’s electricity bill for about year. In about 100 cities, the streetlights have been replaced with LED bulbs, which is a saving of a huge amount per day. LED bulbs use a tenth of electricity as compared to other bulbs. Once people realize that by using LED bulbs, their electricity bills will reduce, they will be prepared to make the initial heavy investment also. Although the international and national level steps are imperative, it is also a fact that individual action combined with governmental action can do a lot more to prevent climate change than if individual citizens were not involved. In a world of six billion people, if everyone stopped wasting water, disposed off their rubbish properly, started accepting recycled material and stopped succumbing to consumerism, then it would go a long way in solving the problem of environment. Summing up, individual citizens cannot sit back and say it is someone else’s responsibility to protect the environment; we must all play our part – individual citizens and governments at the national and international level.
Climate
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change
is a phenomenon affecting all
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people
in all walks of life, from
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individual
citizens to whole

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countries
and huge multinational
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companies
.
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, I disagree with the notion that the
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only
way to

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address
the environmental problems is at
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international
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level
. I
firmly
believe that this colossal
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problem


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can
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only
be handled
if all
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individuals
contribute; all
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governments
take
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steps
at
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national
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level
and
also
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join
hands at an
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international
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level
.
Undoubtedly
, gigantic
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steps
need to
be taken
, and are
being taken
at the
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international
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level
. The ‘COP21’ in Paris in November 2015 is a
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step
in this direction. The aim of ‘COP21’ is well known: to reach a universal agreement limiting the rise in global average temperature to
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2°C
above
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pre-industrial
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levels
. All nations
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are realizing
that climate
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change
is one of the greatest challenges faced by mankind
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today
.

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Many
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steps
can
be taken
at the
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national
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level
.
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Governments
can aware
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people
of the benefits of
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using


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energy
efficient devices.
For instance
, this year
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government
of India gave 2 LED
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bulbs
to each
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government
employee at Rs 10/- each under the “Prakash Path” scheme. The cost of each
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bulb
is Rs 400/-. The cost will
be recovered
by adding a
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very
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small
amount in each month’s electricity bill for about year. In about 100 cities, the streetlights have
been replaced
with LED
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bulbs
, which is a saving of a huge amount per day.

LED
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bulbs
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use
a tenth of electricity as compared to other
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bulbs
.
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Once
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people
realize that by using
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LED


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bulbs
, their electricity bills will
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reduce
, they will
be prepared
to
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make
the initial heavy investment
also
.

Although the
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international
and
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national
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level
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steps
are imperative, it is
also
a fact that
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individual
action

combined with governmental action can do a lot more to
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prevent
climate
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change
than if individual

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citizens
were not involved. In a world of six billion
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people
, if everyone
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stopped
wasting water,
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disposed


off their rubbish
properly
,
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started
accepting recycled material and
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stopped
succumbing to consumerism,

then it would go a long way in solving the problem of environment.

Summing up,
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individual
citizens cannot sit back and say it is someone else’s responsibility to protect the

environment; we
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must
all play our part
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–
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individual
citizens and
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governments
at the
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national
and

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international
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level
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental problem are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment is to address it at an international level. with t v. 2

Essay
  American English
16 paragraphs
382 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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