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In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages. v.1

In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages. v. 1
The urban planning replaces shops, schools, offices, and homes into specific areas. I am the opinion of the disadvantages are eclipsed by the advantages. It is undeniable that there are some drawbacks to some extent in terms of budget and environment. Regarding the former, it spends a lot of money in resettlement for people living in these urban-planned areas rather than allocating budget to invest in the education system. If the urban planning legislation has unforeseen issues, which influences negatively on resident’ daily life in transportation and accommodation besides a huge amount of money is wasted. The other major point is environmental pollution when the new construction is carried out, the first stage is the destruction of existing urban infrastructures creating a vast disposed waste which puts a heavy burden on the environment of these areas, also, the waste-disposed products from the new building projects in the construction stage exacerbates the pollution. Despite the aforementioned argument, the legislation is more substantial related to the financial management and tourist destination. The first contribution is that it is more suitable for authority to manage the business when they gather in specific areas about taxes and sales and increase the competitiveness between the shops have the same products being able to valorize. Another thing is the convenience of logical rearrangement advances the urban face compared to other cities, which becomes a tourist attraction, for example, Singapore is one of the most metropolitan having reasonable urban planning policy, which attract the most tourisms each year in Asia. In conclusion, although there are a lot of concerning drawbacks, I believe this policy should be implemented as the positive effects do outweigh the issues it brings.
The
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urban
planning replaces shops, schools, offices, and homes into specific
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areas
. I am the opinion of the disadvantages
are eclipsed
by the advantages.

It is undeniable that there are
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some
drawbacks to
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some
extent in terms of budget and environment. Regarding the former, it spends
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a lot of
money in resettlement for
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people
living in these urban-planned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
rather
than allocating budget to invest in the education system. If the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
planning legislation has unforeseen issues, which influences
negatively
on resident’ daily life in transportation and accommodation
besides
a huge amount of money
is wasted
. The other major point is environmental pollution when the new construction
is carried
out, the
first
stage is the destruction of existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
infrastructures creating a vast disposed waste which puts a heavy burden on the environment of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
,
also
, the waste-disposed products from the new building projects in the construction stage exacerbates the pollution.

Despite the aforementioned argument, the legislation is more substantial related to the financial management and tourist destination. The
first
contribution is that it is more suitable for authority to manage the business when they gather in specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
areas
about taxes and sales and increase the competitiveness between the shops have the same products being able to valorize. Another thing is the convenience of logical rearrangement advances the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
face compared to other cities, which becomes a tourist attraction,
for example
, Singapore is one of the most metropolitan having reasonable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
urban
planning policy, which attract the most
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tourisms
each year in Asia.

In conclusion
, although there are
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a lot of
concerning drawbacks, I believe this policy should
be implemented
as the
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positive
effects do outweigh the issues it brings.
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IELTS essay In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages. v. 1

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