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q6 Using points and examples from the talk, explain how archeologists must take the origin of amber and coral in consideration when caring for them. v.1

q6 Using points and examples from the talk, explain how archeologists must take the origin of amber and coral in consideration when caring for them. v. 1
In today’s competitive world, employers want to be able to contact their employees no matter where they are in order to maintain smooth operations. This approach may have many positives, but it does have a few negatives as well. To start with, it is important to be able to contact an employee especially during difficult times at work on in case of an emergency. For example, hospitals need to be able to contact their staff in case of patient emergencies, trauma and calamities. This may help save a life or many lives. In times of troubleshooting certain tasks, a phone call or email may save a presentation, project or win a deal for an organization). Certain organizations, call centres for instance, need their staff on-call throughout the year. Any failure to do so may lead to loss of business and revenue. Contacting employees does not always benefit employers. To begin with, no employee likes to be contacted by their employer when they are at home or on holiday. This may invoke a feeling of resentment towards the employer. Some individuals are forced to work round the clock. They even take their work home. This leads to overworking, which may further lead to health risks and other related issues. Moreover, the employee may feel unhappy at his workplace and may even consider seeking job opportunities elsewhere. No employer benefits from an unhappy workforce as it may affect the growth and success of an organization. In conclusion, contacting an employee may prove fruitful in certain situations, it may have a bearing on employee happiness and health. It could even lead to attrition.
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no matter where they are in order to maintain smooth operations. This approach may have
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positives,
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with, it is
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important
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employee
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during difficult times at work on in case of an emergency.
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, hospitals need to be able to contact their staff in case of patient emergencies, trauma and calamities. This may
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help
save a life or
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many
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. In times of troubleshooting certain tasks, a phone call or email may save a presentation, project or win a deal for an organization
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. Certain organizations, call
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centres
for instance
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so
may
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lead
to loss of business and revenue.

Contacting
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employees
does not always benefit
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employers
. To
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with, no
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employee
likes to
be contacted
by their
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employer
when they are at home or on holiday. This may invoke a feeling of resentment towards the
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employer
.
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Some
individuals
are forced
to work round the clock. They even take their work home. This leads to overworking, which may
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lead
to health
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risks
and other related issues.
Moreover
, the
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employee
may feel unhappy at his workplace and may even consider seeking job opportunities elsewhere. No
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employer
benefits from an unhappy workforce as it may affect the growth and success of an organization.

In conclusion
, contacting an
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employee
may prove fruitful in certain situations, it may have a bearing on
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employee
happiness and health. It could even
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lead
to attrition.
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IELTS essay q6 Using points and examples from the talk, explain how archeologists must take the origin of amber and coral in consideration when caring for them. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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