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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? v.4

Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. with this view? v. 4
Some are of the opinion that people should be motivated to make their abode in the rural areas rather than the urban places to unravel the challenges of congestion and transportation. I strongly agree with the statement because life in the suburbs experience less vehicular gridlock and minimal pollution. Life in the rural parts of the countries can be said to experience less traffic jams unlike what is frequently found in the towns. Vehicular movements in the villages are not as many as you will find in the towns, consequently there are little or no gridlocks in these parts. For example, a research conducted by the New York traffic police department found out that there were higher traffic congestions in the cities because of the high number of vehicles. The rate of air pollution in the suburbs is next to none. People who live in the remote parts of the countries usually experience a pollution free environment, this in most cases is often as a result of fewer vehicles and industries that emit carbon monoxide, therefore, resulting in a healthy environment to live in. To illustrate, a survey carried out in Kenya in 2001 concluded that 80% of people who live in the villages live a healthier and longer life than their counterparts in the cities. In conclusion, I can safely say that I agree without a doubt that citizens should be encouraged, by any means possible, to live in the villages because making the remote areas home does not only reduce their stress levels but it is also beneficial to their health.
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are of the opinion that
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people
should
be motivated
to
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make
their abode in the rural areas
rather
than the urban places to unravel the challenges of congestion and transportation. I
strongly
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agree
with the statement
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because
life in the suburbs experience less vehicular gridlock and minimal pollution.

Life in the rural parts of the countries can
be said
to experience less traffic jams unlike what is
frequently
found in the towns. Vehicular movements in the villages are not as
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many
as you will find in the towns,
consequently
there are
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little
or no gridlocks in these parts.
For example
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a research
conducted by the New York traffic police department found out that there were higher traffic congestions in the cities
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because
of the high number of vehicles.

The rate of air pollution in the suburbs is
next
to none.
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People
who
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live
in the remote parts of the countries
usually
experience a pollution free environment, this
in most cases
is
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often
as a result
of fewer vehicles and industries that emit carbon monoxide,
therefore
, resulting in a healthy environment to
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live
in. To illustrate, a survey carried out in Kenya in 2001 concluded that 80% of
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people
who
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live
in the villages
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live
a healthier and longer life than their counterparts in the cities.

In conclusion
, I can
safely
say that I
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agree
without a doubt that citizens should
be encouraged
, by any means possible, to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
live
in the villages
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because
making the remote areas home does not
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only
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reduce
their
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stress
levels
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but
it is
also
beneficial to their health.
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IELTS essay Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. with this view? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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