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q6 STAT scan. Using point and examples from the talk explain how this new machine aids in diagnosis and treatment of the patients. v.1

q6 STAT scan. Using point and examples from the talk explain how this new machine aids in diagnosis and treatment of the patients. v. 1
The methods of mitigating traffic congestion have been a heated topic of controversy. Some people argue that the construction of larger roads is the answer for the problem. However, I contend that such a solution is ineffective in the long term, while the opinion to construct railways and subways is a far better measure. There is a common fallacy that governmental spending on building larger roads could address the problem of traffic congestion. An increase in road size could reduce the traffic intensity in the short term, but larger roads also mean that the citizens are barely encouraged to purchase more individuals' vehicles. This leads to the fact that the larger roads would soon be filled with intense traffic again. For instance, traffic jams still exist in several cities, even after they expanded the roads last year. In brief, if this was the accurate solution, traffic jams would not still persist in the long run. Rail and subways, however, could ensure that traffic congestion is properly addressed. Unlike cars and buses, trains are capable of transporting thousands of people simultaneously at a time and thus would meet the transport demand of a vast number of passengers. Moreover, trains do not have to go through the intersections and traffic lights and dedicated lines ensure their travel is being hardly interrupted. In other words, trains are always on time, regardless of the level of traffic. This level of punctuality would encourage many to choose railways and subways as their primary means of transport, and the number of individual vehicles decreases accordingly. As a result, traffic congestion could be tackled successfully. As to conclude, the above facts evidently elaborate that, building more and larger roads is an unsustainable measure, while train and subways would be a much more effective solution for the problem of traffic congestion.
The methods of mitigating
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traffic
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congestion
have been a heated topic of controversy.
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Some
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people
argue that the construction of larger
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roads
is the answer for the problem.
However
, I contend that such a solution is ineffective in the long term, while the opinion to construct railways and
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subways
is a far better measure.

There is a common fallacy that governmental spending on building larger
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roads
could address the problem of
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traffic
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congestion
. An increase in
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road
size could
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reduce
the
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traffic
intensity in the short term,
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but
larger
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roads
also
mean that the citizens are
barely
encouraged to
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purchase
more individuals' vehicles. This leads to the fact that the larger
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roads
would
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soon
be filled
with intense
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traffic
again.
For instance
,
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traffic
jams
still
exist in several cities, even after they expanded the
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roads
last year.
In brief
, if this was the accurate solution,
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traffic
jams would not
still
persist in the long run.

Rail and
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subways
,
however
, could ensure that
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traffic
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congestion
is
properly
addressed. Unlike cars and buses,
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trains
are capable of transporting thousands of
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people
simultaneously
at a time and
thus
would
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meet
the transport demand of a vast number of passengers.
Moreover
,
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trains
do not
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have to
go through the intersections and
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traffic
lights and dedicated lines ensure their travel
The adverb 'hardly' is usually put between 'is' and 'being'.
is being hardly
interrupted.
In other words
,
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trains
are always on time, regardless of the level of
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traffic
. This level of punctuality would encourage
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
to choose railways and
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subways
as their primary means of transport, and the number of individual vehicles decreases
accordingly
.
As a result
,
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traffic
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congestion
could
be tackled
successfully
.

As
to conclude
, the above facts
evidently
elaborate that, building more and larger
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
is an unsustainable measure, while
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train
and
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subways
would be a much more effective solution for the problem of
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traffic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
congestion
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay q6 STAT scan. Using point and examples from the talk explain how this new machine aids in diagnosis and treatment of the patients. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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