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q6 The professor explained three different elements of cell theory. Explain what these elements are how the function in biology. v.1

q6 The professor explained three different elements of cell theory. Explain what these elements are how the function in biology. v. 1
Although the government takes certain measures to minimise traffic congestions, some cities are still facing these complications. As the usage of automobiles has increased rapidly, there is also an increment in blockage, and these are leading us towards issues. Not only excessive population, but also inadequate rules play's a vital role in these complications; however, we will ponder the necessary remedies in order to overcome these issues. While there would be a plethora of problems in the society, the rampant improvement in the jam is the major issue. Firstly, the massive number in the populations is the primary reason for these collisions; moreover, not implementing the correct rules also plays a crucial role, so the urban areas are facing these issues. Most noticeable of all, it is clear that the rise in population is leading to an exorbitant consumption of vehicles, and causing effect of the bottleneck; for example, everyone is owning an automobile. In addition to this, though the citizens are suffering with improper rules, the law enforcement agencies are still not solving these congestions, so these problems seem to be inevitable. While the points referenced above seems convincing, we still have one more essential topic to cover the solutions for these problems. As these complications were incrementing day by day, we must follow some pivotal remedies in order to overcome them. Avoiding the use of private vehicles, and initiating the consumption of public transport help us to reduce these issues; furthermore, the necessary principles that people must follow must be implemented. Even though there are necessary principles that people must follow and respect, these rules were avoided, and hence, the collision occurs. In addition to this, 90 percent of the problems are because of the exorbitant use of private vehicles, so the citizens must understand the importance of public transport, and the use of public vehicles such as train and bus must be increased. These supporting points show the solutions for minimizing problems. In conclusion, most of the cities face high blockage problems because of over populations as well as improper rules. Despite of owning an automobile, people must start using public transport in order to rectify this issue.
Although the
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government
takes certain measures to
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minimise
traffic congestions,
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some
cities are
still
facing these complications. As the usage of automobiles has increased
rapidly
, there is
also
an increment in blockage, and these are leading us towards
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issues
. Not
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only
excessive
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population
,
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but
also
inadequate
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rules
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play's
a vital role in these complications;
however
, we will ponder the necessary remedies in order to overcome these issues.

While there would be a plethora of
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problems
in the society, the rampant improvement in the jam is the major
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issue
.
Firstly
, the massive number in the
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populations
is the primary reason for these collisions;
moreover
, not implementing the correct
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rules
also
plays a crucial role,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the urban areas are facing these
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issues
. Most noticeable of all, it is
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clear
that the rise in
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population
is leading to an exorbitant consumption of
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vehicles
, and causing effect of the bottleneck;
for example
, everyone
The verb 'owning' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
is owning
an automobile.
In addition
to this, though the citizens are suffering with improper
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rules
, the law enforcement agencies are
still
not solving these congestions,
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so
these
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problems
seem to be inevitable. While the points referenced above seems convincing, we
still
have one more essential topic to cover the solutions for these problems.

As these complications were incrementing day by day, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
follow
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some
pivotal remedies in order to overcome them. Avoiding the
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use
of private
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vehicles
, and initiating the consumption of
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public
transport
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
these
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issues
;
furthermore
, the necessary principles that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
follow
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be implemented
.
Even though
there are necessary principles that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
follow and respect, these
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rules
were avoided
, and
hence
, the collision occurs.
In addition
to this, 90 percent of the
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problems
are
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because
of the exorbitant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of private
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vehicles
,
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so
the citizens
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must
understand the importance of
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public
transport, and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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public
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vehicles
such as train and bus
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be increased
.

These supporting points
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show
the solutions for
Do not mix variants of the same word ('minimize' and 'minimise') within a single text.
minimizing
problems.

In conclusion
, most of the cities face high blockage
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problems
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of over
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populations
as well
as improper
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rules
.
Did you mean "Despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
Despite of
owning an automobile,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport in order to rectify this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issue
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay q6 The professor explained three different elements of cell theory. Explain what these elements are how the function in biology. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
361 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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