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Q4. 41 Behaviorism is a school of thought in psychology based on the assumption that learning occurs through interactions with the environment. Using the main points and examples describe classical conditioning. v.1

Q4. 41 Behaviorism is a school of thought in psychology based on the assumption that learning occurs through interactions with the environment. Using the main points and examples describe classical conditioning. v. 1
It is commonly believed that rich countries should help undeveloped countries in case of a calamity. I strongly agree with this statement because of two main reasons which are helping people in need is a common sense, and developed countries have what it takes to provide assistance. To begin with, offering a helping hand to those in need should be an ethical value. Natural calamities are often unexpected and sudden, which put the countries in a difficult situation. However, such disasters affect poor countries more than rich countries. Therefore, we should be taught from birth to care for every individual regardless of their nation, gender, ethnicity, or religion. That is to say, if we have enough supplies to share with a country which is facing a calamity, we should do so. Another reason why rich nations should help poorer ones is that they are financially suitable for such situations. Since their economies are mighty, they can deliver humanitarian aid for nations struggling with natural disasters. This aid can be transportation, evacuation, food, shelter, or medical care. For instance, after an earthquake in a small and poor country, countless developed nations helped with all these types of support, and with no doubt, that small country would be inadequate to cope up with the condition. In conclusion, I am certain that wealthy countries should provide aid for the poor nations when they need it because it is the morally right thing to do, and rich nations have enough supplies to share with the ones in need.
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commonly
believed that
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rich
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countries
should
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help
undeveloped
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countries
in case of a calamity. I
strongly
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agree
with this statement
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because
of two main reasons which are helping
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people
in
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need
is a common sense, and developed
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countries
have what it takes to provide assistance.

To
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begin
with, offering a helping hand to those in
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need
should be an ethical value. Natural calamities are
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often
unexpected and sudden, which put the
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countries
in a difficult situation.
However
, such disasters affect poor
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countries
more than
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rich
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countries
.
Therefore
, we should
be taught
from birth to care for every individual regardless of their
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nation
, gender, ethnicity, or religion.
That is
to say, if we have
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enough
supplies to share with a
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country
which is facing a calamity, we should do
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so
.

Another reason why
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rich
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nations
should
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help
poorer ones is that they are
financially
suitable for such situations. Since their economies are mighty, they can deliver humanitarian aid for
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nations
struggling with natural disasters. This aid can be transportation, evacuation, food, shelter, or medical care.
For instance
, after an earthquake in a
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small
and poor
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country
, countless developed
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nations
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helped
with all these types of support, and with no doubt, that
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small
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country
would be inadequate to cope up with the condition.

In conclusion
, I am certain that wealthy
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countries
should provide aid for the poor
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nations
when they
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need
it
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because
it is the
morally
right thing to do, and
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rich
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nations
have
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enough
supplies to share with the ones in
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need
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Q4. 41 Behaviorism is a school of thought in psychology based on the assumption that learning occurs through interactions with the environment. Using the main points and examples describe classical conditioning. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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