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q3. Parking lots B and C will be closed. State the women's opinion and the reasons she gives to hold that opinion v.1

q3. Parking lots B and C will be closed. State the women's opinion and the reasons she gives to hold that opinion v. 1
It is argued that children at a young age are supposed to be taught how to differentiate right and wrong and the key factor helping them obtain this lesson is punishment. I personally favour this idea for some following reasons. In addition, I would like to suggest some other feasible types of punishment that can be used effectively by parents and teachers to form a good manner for children. In the first place, being able to recognize what is right or wrong at such young age is of paramount importance for children. Children when become old enough to be aware of what they see around will likely to imitate those, no matter they are positive or negative. Especially nowadays, there are countless of sources of information that can lead to misleading imitations among children as they are now easily accessible to those due to the advancement of social media. Therefore, adults need to help them distinguish the good and the bad. This life lesson will be effectively taught by imposing punishments on children whenever they do something wrong. By doing so, children will be well-aware of the fact that if they misbehave again, they will be suffering from these punishments. Since punishment is crucial in forming the personality of children, the way adults punish must be taken into consideration. In this case, positive punishments are probably more effective than negative ones. For example, if a child misbehave and his or her parents apply a physical punishment by hitting the child with a tool, for instance, then the child will probably become hateful to everything around and continue to make mistakes, not to mention any health-related problems the child might suffer. By contrast, some positive approaches have proven effective. For instance, if a child does not do homework, so parents can punish them by not cooking dinner for him or reduce his playing time during a day by one hour. This will likely change the attitude of the child and hopefully he will do his homework next time. In conclusion, the distinction between the good and the bad is important, especially among children and punishment is considered a good method to teach them this lesson. Also, there are many positive ways to shape a proper behaviour for children, making them into useful adults later on.
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is argued
that
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children
at a young age
are supposed
to
be taught
how to differentiate right and
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wrong
and the key factor helping them obtain this lesson is
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punishment
. I
personally
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favour
this
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idea
for
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some
following reasons.
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, I would like to suggest
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some
other feasible types of
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punishment
that can be
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used
effectively
by parents and teachers to form a
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good
manner for children.

In the
first
place, being able to recognize what is right or
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wrong
at such young age is of paramount importance for
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children
.
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Children
when become
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old
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enough
to be aware of what they
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see
around will likely to imitate those, no matter they are
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positive
or
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negative
.
Especially
nowadays, there are
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countless of sources
of information that can lead to misleading imitations among
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children
as they are
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now
easily
accessible to those due to the advancement of social media.
Therefore
, adults need to
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help
them distinguish the
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good
and the
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bad
. This life lesson will be
effectively
taught by imposing
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punishments
on
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children
whenever they do something
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wrong
. By doing
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so
,
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children
will be well-aware of the fact that if they misbehave again, they will be suffering from these punishments.

Since
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punishment
is crucial in forming the personality of
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children
, the way adults punish
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must
be taken
into consideration.
In this case
,
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positive
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punishments
are
probably
more effective than
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negative
ones.
For example
, if a
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child
misbehave and
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his or her
parents apply a physical
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punishment
by hitting the
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child
with a tool,
for instance
, then the
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child
will
probably
become hateful to everything around and continue to
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make
mistakes, not to mention any health-related problems the
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child
might suffer. By contrast,
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some
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positive
approaches have proven effective.
For instance
, if a
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child
does not do homework,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
parents can punish them by not cooking dinner for him or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
his playing time during a day by one hour. This will likely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the attitude of the
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child
and
hopefully
he will do his homework
next
time.

In conclusion
, the distinction between the
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good
and the
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bad
is
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important
,
especially
among
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children
and
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punishment
is considered
a
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good
method to teach them this lesson.
Also
, there are
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many
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positive
ways to shape a proper
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behaviour
for
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children
, making them into useful adults later on.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay q3. Parking lots B and C will be closed. State the women's opinion and the reasons she gives to hold that opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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