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New lab facilities for chemistry departmentOn behalf of the university president, the Dean of Sciences has announced the construction of a state-of-the-art research laboratory for the Chemistry Department. Because of the required financial output, tuition v.1

New lab facilities for chemistry departmentOn behalf of the university president, the Dean of Sciences has announced the construction of a state-of-the-art research laboratory for the Chemistry Department. Because of the required financial output, tuition v. 1
Human health and wellness are vital, so educational institutions should add extra initiatives to educate students about these two aspects. This essay agrees that additional measures are required to make pupils aware of general health and fitness. Allocating sometime, especially for teaching about the human body and its requirements apart from regular curriculum will benefit the students and two measures will be further discussed as a way to make students aware of them. To begin with, daily yoga sessions after school would be a viable solution. Yoga training will also include lectures which give a clear description of each part of the body, and its asana will help the body improve and maintain standards of mental health and physical fitness. Yoga is widely accepted and approved throughout the world, its roots are from India, and it is proved that 100% of the population who adopt yoga in daily their routine will see a drastic recovery in terms of human wellness just in 6 months. Another way is to educate students, encouraging them to consume homemade food. Schools can conduct sessions for parents and pupil regarding the importance of diet, and impose rules to carry their own meals every day rather than relying on fast food available in canteens. For example, a school in Japan, does not provide canteen facilities, therefore, students consume only nutritious food made at home, and this has a great impact on students’ health when compared to their counterparts from the other institutions. In conclusion, educational bodies conducting sports days and having regular classes is not enough, schools should go beyond and promote general health and fitness in the form of special activities which are to be conducted frequently.
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so
educational institutions should
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add
extra initiatives to educate
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students
about these two aspects. This essay
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agrees
that additional measures
are required
to
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make
pupils aware of general
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health
and fitness. Allocating sometime,
especially
for teaching about the human
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body
and its requirements apart from regular curriculum will benefit the
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students
and two measures will be
further
discussed as a way to
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make
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students
aware of them.

To
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begin
with, daily yoga sessions after
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school
would be a viable solution. Yoga training will
also
include lectures which give a
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clear
description of each part of the
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body
, and its
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asana
will
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help
the
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body
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improve
and maintain standards of mental
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health
and physical fitness. Yoga is
widely
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accepted
and approved throughout the world, its roots are from India, and it
is proved
that 100% of the population who adopt yoga in daily their routine will
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see
a drastic recovery in terms of human wellness
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just
in 6 months.

Another way is to educate
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students
, encouraging them to consume homemade food.
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Schools
can conduct sessions for parents and pupil regarding the importance of diet, and impose
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rules
to carry their
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own
meals every day
rather
than relying on
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fast
food available in canteens.
For example
, a
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school
in Japan, does not provide canteen facilities,
therefore
,
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students
consume
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only
nutritious food made at home, and this has a great impact on
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students’
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health
when compared to their counterparts from the other institutions.

In conclusion
, educational
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bodies
conducting sports days and having regular classes is not
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enough
,
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schools
should go beyond and promote general
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health
and fitness in the form of special activities which are to
be conducted
frequently
.
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IELTS essay New lab facilities for chemistry departmentOn behalf of the university president, the Dean of Sciences has announced the construction of a state-of-the-art research laboratory for the Chemistry Department. Because of the required financial output, tuition v. 1

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4 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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