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66. Some students prefer the internet-based teaching. Others prefer to study intraditional classrooms. Which method of studying do you prefer and why? v.2

66. Some students prefer the internet-based teaching. Others prefer to study intraditional classrooms. Which method of studying do you prefer and why? v. 2
Greta Thunberg is the initiator of the "Fridays for Future" movement, which gains more and more attention. Teenagers and children demonstrate for environmental protection all over the world. They want the governments to act in order to stop the climate change. The question is, whether the our leaders are responsible for the protection or whether every individual should take responsibility for it. To begin, industrial companies are responsible for the major part of the climate change. Companies exhaust a lot of CO2 and NOX gases, which are considered to be the reason for the Greenhouse effect. Therefore, it is necessary that our political leaders become active and set the rules. The government has to regulate the amount of gases exhausted. Either a CO2 tax or fines because of pollution is necessary. Secondly, it is necessary to fund and to support public transport. Buses and trains are not attractive enough, because of high ticket prices and bad connections. Consequently, people go by car instead using public transportation. This has to be changed and the government responsible for it. On the other hand, every individual should take responsibility for the protection of our environment. It is not necessary to fly to Australia for 1 week. Moreover, people should think twice before they buy any goods. The question is, whether the new product is really necessary or whether one buys it just because it is cheap. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the climate change can be stopped. The main actor, however, is the government, but people can contribute a big part as well.
Greta Thunberg is the initiator of the
"
Fridays for Future
"
movement, which gains more and more attention.
Teenagers
and children demonstrate for environmental protection all over the world. They want the
governments
to act in order to
stop
the climate
change
. The question is, whether
the our leaders
are responsible for the protection or whether every individual should take responsibility for it.

To
begin
, industrial
companies
are responsible for the major part of the climate
change
.
Companies
exhaust
a lot of
CO2 and NOX gases, which
are considered
to be the reason for the Greenhouse effect.
Therefore
, it is
necessary
that our political leaders become active and set the
rules
. The
government
has to
regulate the amount of gases exhausted. Either a CO2 tax or fines
because
of pollution is necessary.

Secondly
, it is
necessary
to fund and to support public transport. Buses and trains are not attractive
enough
,
because
of high ticket prices and
bad
connections.
Consequently
,
people
go by car
instead
using public transportation. This
has to
be
changed
and the
government
responsible for it.

On the other hand
, every individual should take responsibility for the protection of our environment. It is not
necessary
to
fly
to Australia for 1 week.

Moreover
,
people
should
think
twice
before
they
buy
any
goods
. The question is, whether the new product is
really
necessary
or whether one
buys
it
just
because
it is
cheap
.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that the climate
change
can be
stopped
. The main actor,
however
, is the
government
,
but
people
can contribute a
big
part
as well
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay 66. Some students prefer the internet-based teaching. Others prefer to study intraditional classrooms. Which method of studying do you prefer and why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
261 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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