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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. v.2

Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. v. 2
While some people choose to use public transportations, others prefer to use their own cars. It is believed that the excessive usage of personal cars has caused congestion problems in big cities and therefore people should use public transportations more often. However, public transportations have their own positive and negative sides and the following essay will discuss them in details. It is undeniable, that public transportations have some weaknesses. Some people still choose to use their own private vehicles, though the government has encouraged them to use public transports. It is because public transportations are not as safe as private cars and some criminal activities on public buses or trains such as pocket thieves are still being reported. And then public transportations are not reliable in terms of preciseness and accuracy. Many people have complained about the preciseness and the consistency of these public transportations schedules, which impacted to their work or study time. Despite its weakness points, public transportations bring a lot of benefits for individuals and societies. Firstly, it is clear that the existence of public transportations will automatically reduce traffic problems. Secondly, if the utilisation of public transportations increased, it means that there will be a reduction in the consumption of fossil fuels. Consequently, it will reduce air pollution and global warming issues. Therefore, the governments should encourage their residents to use public transportations. In conclusion, people have different opinions about public transportations. Some people enjoy using them, while others choose to use their own personal vehicles. Although public transportations have some weaknesses, I do believe that the benefits outweighed the drawbacks. I also suggest that the government should improve the public transportation services, therefore more and more people are attracted to use public transportations.
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, others prefer to
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cars. It
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more
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have their
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sides and the following essay will discuss them in
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It is undeniable, that
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have
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weaknesses.
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still
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private vehicles, though the
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has encouraged them to
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transports. It is
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are not as safe as private cars and
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criminal activities on
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buses or trains such as pocket thieves are
still
being reported
. And then
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transportations
are not reliable in terms of preciseness and accuracy.
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people
have complained about the preciseness and the consistency of these
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schedules, which impacted to their work or study time.

Despite its weakness points,
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bring
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a lot of
benefits for individuals and societies.
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that the existence of
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will
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reduce
traffic problems.
Secondly
, if the
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utilisation
of
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increased, it means that there will be a reduction in the consumption of fossil fuels.
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, it will
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reduce
air pollution and global warming issues.
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, the
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governments
should encourage their residents to
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transportations.

In conclusion
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opinions about
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.
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enjoy using them, while others choose to
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personal vehicles. Although
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have
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weaknesses, I do believe that the benefits outweighed the drawbacks. I
also
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should
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the
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services,
therefore
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are attracted
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14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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