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Q: Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cou v.1

Q: Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cou v. 1
Anti-aging products and several beauty treatments are really popular nowadays. The reason is so many people, especially women in their 30s, avoid looking older. I believe this trend has both advantages and disadvantages. This essay will explain both points of views related to it. First and foremost, who are not afraid of imagining our looses its elasticity and furthermore form wrinkles in facial areas? As we are getting older, it is certain that our metabolism will get slower. Unfortunately, there is no way for us to stop this biological process. We just can make an effort to slow down the aging process by several ways. For example, some people do the skin care routine by using the products contained astaxanthin and retinoic acid. Those products maintain the skin elasticity and make it look younger. In one hand, it can be beneficial if we only use the proper treatment suggested by professionals, dermatologists in this case. However, there are so many cases, people cannot afford to consult to a dermatologist and buy high-quality skin care products. They end up trying dangerous surgeries conducted by a non-professional who offers doing procedures with lower price and can give instantaneous result. For instance, some women do the Botox injection in an unlicensed beauty salon. This can ruin their hormone system in the long run or in worst case it can cause a direct fatal effect. To conclude, I believe there is nothing wrong with people want to look younger as long as they follow a proper and healthy procedures. If someone only cares about finding a lower-price treatment without considering its safety, it will cause a problem. So, in my opinion, this phenomenon has both good and bad impacts depends on how people concern about their safety in the first place and trust the long-term process instead of craving for something that can provide an instant result.
Anti-aging
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products
and several beauty treatments are
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popular nowadays. The reason is
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so
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many
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people
,
especially
women in their 30s, avoid looking older. I believe this trend has both advantages and disadvantages. This essay will
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explain
both points of views related to it.

First
and foremost, who are not afraid of imagining our looses its elasticity and
furthermore
form wrinkles in facial areas? As we are getting older, it is certain that our metabolism will
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get
slower. Unfortunately, there is no way for us to
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stop
this biological process. We
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just
can
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make
an effort to slow down the aging process by several ways.
For example
,
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some
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people
do the skin care routine by using the
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products
contained
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astaxanthin
and
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retinoic
acid. Those
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products
maintain the skin elasticity and
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make
it look younger.

In one hand, it can be beneficial if we
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only
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use
the proper treatment suggested by professionals, dermatologists
in this case
.
However
, there are
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so
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many
cases,
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people
cannot afford to consult to a dermatologist and
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buy
high-quality skin care
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products
. They
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end
up trying
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dangerous
surgeries conducted by a non-professional who offers doing procedures with lower price and can give instantaneous result.
For instance
,
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some
women do the Botox injection in an unlicensed beauty salon. This can ruin their hormone system in the long run or in
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worst
case it can cause a direct fatal effect.

To conclude
, I believe there is nothing
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wrong
with
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people
want to look younger as long as they follow a proper and healthy procedures. If someone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
cares about finding a lower-price treatment without considering its safety, it will cause a problem.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, in my opinion, this phenomenon has both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impacts depends on how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
concern about their safety in the
first
place and trust the long-term process
instead
of craving for something that can provide an instant result.
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IELTS essay Q: Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cou v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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