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Q: Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cou v.2

Q: Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cou v. 2
There is currently a contentious argument whether universities should provide graduates with knowledge and skills needed in the workplace or that the university should provide students with knowledge without considering the benefit to the employer. I strongly believe the major role of a university is to equip the students with knowledge and skills that will make them competitive in employment. The main reason why I believe that universities should ensure that their graduates have the needed skills that shall make them employable is that, this world is so competitive and employers are after workers that will improve productivity by bringing to the company new skills and knowledge. Another reason why I support the notion that universities should give the students knowledge and skills that are needed by employers is that when students graduate they expect to find employment and start to pay back the grants they were given during their graduate studies. This they should do so that it can be passed on to others and it can only be achieved if the graduates are absorbed into the employment industry immediately post graduation. In conclusion, I totally support the fact that universities should equip students with knowledge and skills for employment because the world has become so competitive and employers are looking to employ people who have the knowledge and skills and again they need to get absorbed into jobs and repay the grants that were given to them so that others can also benefit from them. Therefore it should be mandatory that universities should produce skillful and knowledgeable graduates.
There is
currently
a contentious argument whether
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universities
should provide
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graduates
with
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knowledge
and
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skills
needed in the workplace or that the
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university
should provide
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students
with
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knowledge
without considering the benefit to the
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employer
. I
strongly
believe the major role of a
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university
is to equip the
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students
with
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knowledge
and
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skills
that will
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make
them competitive in employment.

The main reason why I believe that
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universities
should ensure that their
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graduates
have the needed
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skills
that shall
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make
them employable is that, this world is
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so
competitive and
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employers
are after workers that will
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improve
productivity by bringing to the
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company
new
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skills
and knowledge.

Another reason why I support the notion that
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universities
should give the
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students
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knowledge
and
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skills
that
are needed
by
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employers
is that when
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students
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graduate
they
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expect
to find employment and
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start
to pay back the grants they were
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given
during their
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graduate
studies. This they should do
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so
that it can
be passed
on to others and it can
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only
be achieved
if the
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graduates
are absorbed
into the employment industry immediately post graduation.

In conclusion
, I
totally
support the fact that
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universities
should equip
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students
with
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knowledge
and
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skills
for employment
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because
the world has become
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so
competitive and
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employers
are looking to employ
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people
who have the
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knowledge
and
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skills
and again they need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
absorbed into jobs and repay the grants that were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to them
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so
that others can
also
benefit from them.
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Therefore
it should be mandatory that
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universities
should produce skillful and knowledgeable
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graduates
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Q: Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the cou v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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