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Q= Having police officer patrolling the streets is often considered an essential way to reduce crime. How effective do you think police Street patrolling are? What other ways to reduce crime can you purpose? v.1

Q= Having police officer patrolling the streets is often considered an essential way to reduce crime. How effective do you think police Street patrolling are? What other ways to reduce crime can you purpose? v. 1
Police officers patrolling has been the epicentre of discussion and a unanimous conclusive agreement is yet to be achieved. However, to restrict offenders to crime is best method patrolling of the street. From my prospective, street patrolling is an effective method. In this essay, I will discuss about benefits of police street patrolling, and the supplementary method to reduce crime. To begin with, police, street Petrolling would reduce the various crimes especially at dangerous Streets. Thus, in most of the cities, there are various Street, where thief were standing to rob the people, while patrolling have a detrimental effect on offenders. Owing to which thief did not stand there because of the police. Moreover, they caught many criminals who break the law, consequently that leads to reduce violence around the area. The second most convincing side is, there are other various effective method to plunge crime. Firstly, to install the CCTV cameras on the streets. After that, if anyone does unethical activities, then it is easy caught that person with the help of cameras. Furthermore, government must to pass a strict rule to restrict people to commit crime for the first time because of fear of the law. Also, prison must give strict punishment, afterwards they do not crime again. In conclusion, those facts which discussed above, I would therefore argue that although police street track is a prime way to reduce crime; however, another method is also beneficial. Whereas, government must take serious action on criminal to drop the crime in the area.
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Police
officers
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patrolling
has been the
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epicentre
of discussion and a unanimous conclusive agreement is
yet
to
be achieved
.
However
, to restrict offenders to
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crime
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is best
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method
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patrolling
of the
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street
. From my prospective,
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street
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patrolling
is an effective
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method
. In this essay, I will
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discuss about benefits
of
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police
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street
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patrolling
, and the supplementary
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method
to
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reduce
crime.

To
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begin
with,
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police
,
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street
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Petrolling
would
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reduce
the various
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crimes
especially
at
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dangerous
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Streets
.
Thus
, in most of the cities, there are various
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Street
, where thief were standing to rob the
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people
, while
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patrolling
have a detrimental effect on offenders. Owing to which thief did not stand there
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because
of the
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police
.
Moreover
, they caught
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many
criminals who break the law,
consequently
that leads to
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reduce
violence around the area.

The second most convincing side is, there are other various effective
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method
to plunge
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crime
.
Firstly
, to install the CCTV cameras on the
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streets
. After that, if anyone does unethical activities, then it is easy caught that person with the
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help
of cameras.
Furthermore
,
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government
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must to
pass a strict
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rule
to restrict
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people
to commit
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crime
for the
first
time
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because
of fear of the law.
Also
, prison
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must
give strict punishment, afterwards they do not
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crime
again.

In conclusion
, those facts which discussed above, I would
therefore
argue that although
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police
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street
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track
is a prime way to
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reduce
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crime
;
however
, another
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method
is
also
beneficial.
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Whereas
,
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government
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must
take serious action on criminal to drop the
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crime
in the area.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Q= Having police officer patrolling the streets is often considered an essential way to reduce crime. How effective do you think police Street patrolling are? What other ways to reduce crime can you purpose? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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