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TOPIC # 50 Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and take risks. Which do you prefer? v.1

TOPIC # 50 Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and take risks. Which do you prefer? v. 1
It is true that every country has its own culture, and there has been a debate on whether visitors should follow the local culture or the cultural differences should be accepted. This essay will examine both opinions and show my own perspective, which is the local culture has to be prioritized. The main reason that some people say outsiders should follow cultural rules is that it is the best way to avoid any unpredictable conflict. To illustrate, in my country, Japan, everyone needs to take off their shoes inside. If foreigners did not do so, Japanese people will get angry and be demotivate to welcome them. However, this is not an inevitable trouble if they learn about the culture. Therefore, understanding and following the local culture is crucial to avoid any trouble. On the other hand, others claim that cultural differences should be embraced. The major reason for this is that more tourists can be expected if they allow them more freedom. For example, it is religiously not allowed to drink alchol in Muslim countries, and this can be a reaon that prevents potential travelers from visiting there. However, it is important to raise tourists' satisfaction in order to promote tourism. This is why some people say that countries whose rules are too strict to visitors should allow them to behave freely. In conclusion, considering both views, I tend to believe that visitors should respect and follow the local culture. Although I admit that cultural diversity should not be ignored, following the local culture is beneficial and safe for both visitors and locals.
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country
has its
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own
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culture
, and there has been a debate on whether
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visitors
should follow the
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local
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culture
or the
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cultural
differences should be
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accepted
. This essay will examine both opinions and
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show
my
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own
perspective, which is the
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local
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culture
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has to
be prioritized
.

The main reason that
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some
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say outsiders should follow
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cultural
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rules
is that it is the best way to avoid any unpredictable conflict. To illustrate, in my
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country
, Japan, everyone needs to take off their shoes inside. If foreigners did not do
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, Japanese
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people
will
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angry and be demotivate to welcome them.
However
, this is not an inevitable trouble if they learn about the
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culture
.
Therefore
, understanding and following the
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local
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culture
is crucial to avoid any trouble.

On the other hand
, others claim that
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cultural
differences should
be embraced
. The major reason for this is that more tourists can be
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expected
if they
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allow
them more freedom.
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to drink
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alchol
in Muslim
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countries
, and this can be a
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that
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prevents
potential travelers from visiting there.
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, it is
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important
to raise tourists' satisfaction in order to promote tourism. This is why
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some
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people
say that
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countries
whose
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rules
are too strict to
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visitors
should
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allow
them to behave
freely
.

In conclusion
, considering both views, I tend to believe that
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visitors
should respect and follow the
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local
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culture
. Although I admit that
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cultural
diversity should not be
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ignored
, following the
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local
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culture
is beneficial and safe for both
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visitors
and
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locals
.
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If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay TOPIC # 50 Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new things and take risks. Which do you prefer? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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