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Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The Shanghai metro is the most convenient way to get around the city. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The Shanghai metro is the most convenient way to get around the city. v. 1
In today’s world, public transport plays a huge role in our lives. Especially citizens who live in a metropolis are wondering about the best transportation around a city. It is agreed that metro is the most comfortable way to reach any destination. Analysing both the ability to swiftly get any place on time as well as the capacity to avoid being in a traffic jam will show this. Firstly, a metro cube has control to get any stop on time. For example, particularly every metro system has a timetable that shows people the approximate arrival time to any points. This is exactly the thing that makes the underground transport be so comfortable for the population. Thus this makes it clear why metro is considered to be the most convenient way of travelling. Secondly, transportation by metro creates an opportunity to avoid a traffic jam. It means that the crowd has a chance to save their health system and stop being exhausted from riding by car in the rush hours. Actually, this is one of the main reasons why people prefer to commute by metro. From this, it becomes quite evident that the metro will be always far from other public transports. In conclusion, a subway is the quickest and the most non-traffic-jam way to get to the necessary target. As a result, the statement about the most convenient transport is absolutely true. After analysing this subject, it is predicted that transportation by tubes will be forever more considerable than other ground transport.
In
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today
’s world, public
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transport
plays a huge role in our
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lives
.
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citizens who
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live
in a metropolis are wondering about the best transportation around a city. It is
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agreed
that
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metro
is the most comfortable way to reach any destination.
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Analysing
both the ability to
swiftly
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get
any place on time
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as well as
the capacity to avoid being in a traffic jam will
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show
this.

Firstly
, a
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metro
cube has control to
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get
any
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stop
on time.
For example
,
particularly
every
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metro
system has a timetable that
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shows
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people
the approximate arrival time to any points. This is exactly the thing that
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makes
the underground
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transport
be
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so
comfortable for the population.
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Thus
this
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makes
it
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clear
why
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metro
is considered
to be the most convenient way of travelling.

Secondly
, transportation by
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metro
creates an opportunity to avoid a traffic jam. It means that the crowd has a chance to save their health system and
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stop
being exhausted
from riding by car in the rush hours. Actually, this is one of the main reasons why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
prefer to commute by
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metro
. From this, it becomes quite evident that the
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metro
will be always far from other public transports.

In conclusion
, a subway is the quickest and the most non-traffic-jam way to
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get
to the necessary target.
As a result
, the statement about the most convenient
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transport
is
absolutely
true. After
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analysing
this subject, it
is predicted
that transportation by tubes will be forever more considerable than other ground
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transport
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Public transportation is a great way to travel, particularly within a metropolis. The Shanghai metro is the most convenient way to get around the city. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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