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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.10

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 10
Considering how much time we spend at work, it is important to take into account which factors influence job satisfaction. This essay will explore two of these factors and then explain how they allow job satisfaction to be within the reach of every worker. Of all the various components which lead to job satisfaction, one is self-value. For instance, if two workers do the same job but one gets paid more than the other, the lower paid worker will feel undervalued. Consequently, their self-esteem will plummet, thus compromising their happiness. A second factor is personal passion. An employee may be awarded a lucrative salary, but if they are not interested in their tasks, they will only be satisfied when they leave work. In contrast, a worker who is paid poorly but loves her job may be happier at work than home. In my view, manipulating these elements should enable any worker to enjoy job satisfaction. Looking at the first, self-value does not need to be extrinsically assigned but can instead materialize intrinsically. In other words, if a worker chooses to determine their value based on their own performance, rather than their earnings, they should feel satisfied when they work hard. As for passion, the majority of people sadly do not work in jobs they are passionate about. However, if they focus on how their job allows them to pursue their real passions, this should provide a sense of purpose and thus fulfillment. In conclusion, two of the main factors that affect job satisfaction are one’s sense of value and passion for their job. To my mind these factors con both be hijacked by the mind to permit anybody to enjoy their career.
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satisfaction
. This essay will explore two of these
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how they
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allow
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job
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to be within the reach of every worker.

Of all the various components which lead to
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job
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satisfaction
, one is self-value.
For instance
, if two
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workers
do the same
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but
one
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gets
paid more than the other, the lower paid
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worker
will feel undervalued.
Consequently
, their self-esteem will plummet,
thus
compromising their happiness. A second
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factor
is personal
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passion
. An employee may
be awarded
a lucrative salary,
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if they are not interested in their tasks, they will
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be satisfied
when they
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leave
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, a
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who
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her
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may be happier at
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than home.

In my view, manipulating these elements should enable any
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worker
to enjoy
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satisfaction
. Looking at the
first
, self-value does not need to be
extrinsically
assigned
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but
can
instead
materialize
intrinsically
.
In other words
, if a
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worker
chooses to determine their value based on their
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own
performance,
rather
than their earnings, they should feel satisfied when they
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work
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hard
. As for
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passion
, the majority of
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people
sadly
do not
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work
in
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jobs
they are passionate about.
However
, if they focus on how their
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job
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allows
them to pursue their real
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passions
, this should provide a sense of purpose and
thus
fulfillment.

In conclusion
, two of the main
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factors
that affect
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job
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satisfaction
are one’s sense of value and
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passion
for their
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job
. To my mind these
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factors
con both
be hijacked
by the mind to permit anybody to enjoy their career.
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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