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Protecting the environment is the responsibility of the government. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Protecting the environment is the responsibility of the government. v. 1
It is considered that protection of the environment is the sole responsibility of the state. I agree with the statement and this essay will discuss the reasons firstly by talking about budget availability to look after environmental problems and secondly that it is the responsibility of the government as it collect tax from the public. On reason that the responsibility lies on the government to mitigate environmental issues is that it has the budget available to cope with this issue. Environmental problems such as global warming, air pollution, and water pollution are massive these days, and could be dealt with the back of a readily available money. For instance, environmental problem such air pollution can be diminishes by having a better public transport, which can be accomplished by providing high number of public facilities through investing huge amount of money. However, public can also participate in reducing air pollution through the less usage of personal vehicles. Another reason is that it is the responsibility of the government, as it collect huge taxes from the public. Money collected from the public is mostly for the betterment of different sectors including environmental issues and ought to be utilized in resolving problems such as air pollution and water pollution. This, in turn, means the responsibility of individuals do not remain anymore, as the resources such as money is available to the government to deal with them. For example, in Japan, the government has resolved environmental problems up to 70% in 2016, by utilizing taxes collected from the public. Although, government also provide public services to the people in return to their taxes payed. In conclusion, it is argued that the safety of the environment is the domain of the government. In my opinion, I agree to this notion, as the state has the financial resources available to cope with environmental issues and also it’s the government duty, owing to the tax they collect from the people.
It
is considered
that protection of the environment is the sole
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responsibility
of the state. I
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agree
with the statement and this essay will discuss the reasons
firstly
by talking about budget availability to look after
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environmental
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problems
and
secondly
that it is the
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responsibility
of the
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government
as it collect
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tax
from the public.

On reason that the
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responsibility
lies on the
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government
to mitigate
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environmental
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issues
is that it has the budget
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available
to cope with this
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issue
.
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Environmental
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problems
such as global warming,
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air
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pollution
, and water
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pollution
are massive these days, and could
be dealt
with the back of a
readily
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available
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money
.
For instance
,
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environmental
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problem
such
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air
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pollution
can be
Consider using the past participle "diminished"?
diminishes
by having a better
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public
transport, which can
be accomplished
by providing high number of
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public
facilities through investing huge amount of
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money
.
However
,
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public
can
also
participate in reducing
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air
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pollution
through the less usage of personal vehicles.

Another reason is that it is the
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responsibility
of the
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government
, as it collect huge
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taxes
from the
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public
.
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Money
collected from the
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public
is
mostly
for the betterment of
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different
sectors including
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environmental
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issues
and ought to
be utilized
in resolving
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problems
such as
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air
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pollution
and water
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pollution
. This, in turn, means the
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responsibility
of individuals do not remain anymore, as the resources such as
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money
is
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available
to the
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government
to deal with them.
For example
, in Japan, the
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government
has resolved
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environmental
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problems
up to 70% in 2016, by utilizing
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taxes
collected from the
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public
.
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Although
,
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government
also
provide
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public
services to the
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people
in return to their
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taxes
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payed
.

In conclusion
, it
is argued
that the safety of the environment is the domain of the
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government
. In my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to this notion, as the state has the financial resources
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available
to cope with
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environmental
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issues
and
also
it’s the
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government
duty, owing to the
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tax
they collect from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Protecting the environment is the responsibility of the government. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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