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PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an eecve method of dealing with them. Educaon and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an eecve method of dealing with them. Educaon and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: v. 1
In the rapid changing world nowadays, oppression and use of influential powers do exist which sometimes leads to un-lawful act that may lead to imprisonment. People have argued if putting criminals to penitentiary is an effective way of dealing with them, hence schooling and operation training must be applied to them. This writer will discuss the dilemma and an opinion will be added to the latter. The isolation of the fugitives in the penitentiary was used since from the beginning of time, and it is indeed an effective means of dealing with them decreasing the rate of crime in the said area. In the long run, the captive will be set free, but still its capability is the same as the moment before it was imprisoned due to the facts that the wardens did not assist the individual to change its manner dealing with the world, thus putting the fugitive into the lockup is not an effective approach of dealing with them. However, proper teaching and task training will lure them out from the oppression and will empower them to have jobs and community involvement thus making them a good citizen. Since most of the fugitives belong to the grassroots communities, forcing them to live in the unlawful manner in able to put food on the table, they are forced to steal and sometimes uneducated people put the justice in their hands thereby killing another individual or simply hurting them out of anger. Putting up the human in the cell does not change their ways in how to deal with the world, their rights and responsibilities must be inculcated to them due to the fact that it will just be an unending cycle of in-and-out from the prison. If recommendations were to be given, education and job training should be free both prisoned or not to be a productive part of the country, then the fugitives will have a job after being released from imprisonment. The fugitives will still be imprisoned, but will be having the career training inside the facility of correction. Making them useful by giving them jobs to support them financially when they are freed and still putting the good harmony in the correction, ergo a win-win situation. In conclusions, the writer believes that, learning and livelihood programs empower the individual and refrains from doing bad by abiding the law and implementing it the right process, thereby reducing the crime rate in the nation, in the long run incarceration will be not need.
In the rapid changing world nowadays, oppression and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of influential powers do exist which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
leads to
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un-lawful
act that may lead to imprisonment.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
have argued if putting criminals to penitentiary is an effective way of
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dealing
with them,
hence
schooling and operation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be applied
to them. This writer will discuss the dilemma and an opinion will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to the latter.

The isolation of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fugitives
in the penitentiary was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
since from the beginning of time, and it is
indeed
an effective means of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dealing
with them decreasing the rate of crime in the said area. In the long run, the captive will
be set
free,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
its capability is the same as the moment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
it
was imprisoned
due to the facts that the wardens did not assist the individual to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
its manner
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dealing
with the world,
thus
putting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fugitive
into the lockup is not an effective approach of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dealing
with them.

However
, proper teaching and task
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
will lure them out from the oppression and will empower them to have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
and community involvement
thus
making them a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
citizen. Since most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fugitives
belong to the grassroots communities, forcing them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the unlawful manner in able to put food on the table, they
are forced
to steal and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
uneducated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
put the justice in their hands thereby killing another individual or
simply
hurting them out of anger.

Putting up the human in the cell does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their ways in how to deal with the world, their rights and responsibilities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be inculcated
to them due to the fact that it will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
be an unending cycle of in-and-out from the prison. If recommendations were to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
, education and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
should be free both
Possible spelling mistake found.
prisoned
or not to be a productive part of the country, then the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fugitives
will have a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
after
being released
from imprisonment. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fugitives
will
still
be imprisoned
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
will be having the career
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
inside the facility of correction. Making them useful by giving them
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
to support them
financially
when they
are freed
and
still
putting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
harmony in the correction, ergo a win-win situation.

In conclusions, the writer believes that, learning and livelihood programs empower the individual and refrains from doing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
by abiding the law and implementing it the right process, thereby reducing the crime rate in the nation, in the long run incarceration will be not
Consider using a past participle here: "needed".
need
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an eecve method of dealing with them. Educaon and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
416 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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