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IELTS WRITING TASK -2You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Sending criminals to the prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training more are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with thi v.2

IELTS WRITING TASK -2 Sending criminals to the prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training more are better ways to help them. with thi v. 2
From the time immemorial, it has been a matter of debate how a criminal be punished. Of course, there are people who advocate one way or the other but in my view, we need to find a middle path to make sure that the punishment on the one hand, deters the potential criminal and on the other, it helps to reform the people involved in illegal activities. First of all, we need to differentiate between the crimes which shock our conscience and the minor ones. I strongly believe that punishment and in some cases, severe punishment is the only way out to deter the people committing crimes which are against life, liberty and humanity. What I mean by this is that we should adequately punish the wrongdoers when they are involved in heinous crimes such as gory killing, cold blooded murder, rape, arsons out of vengeance etc. In contrast to such views, I hold a slightly different opinion when the crimes are petty and born out of compulsion or some grave circumstances. That’s why I believe that the minor crimes like pickpocketing, thefts where the motive of commission of such crimes is to sustain one’s family should be treated differently. An opportunity to reform should be given to such person committing such minor offences. We cannot change our society by crowding our prison cells. Imparting education and providing quality jobs are prerequisites of reforming such people. Therefore, in my conclusion, I would like to summarise my viewpoint that education alone can help to move people away from the criminal world. The punitive measures should be adopted only in case of serious offences.
From the time immemorial, it has been a matter of debate how a criminal
be punished
.
Of course
, there are
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people
who advocate one way or the other
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but
in my view, we need to find a middle path to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that the punishment on the one hand, deters the potential criminal and on the other, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to reform the
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people
involved in illegal activities.

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First of all
, we need to differentiate between the
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crimes
which shock our conscience and the minor
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ones
. I
strongly
believe that punishment and in
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some
cases, severe punishment is the
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only
way out to deter the
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people
committing
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crimes
which are against life, liberty and humanity. What I mean by this is that we should
adequately
punish the wrongdoers when they
are involved
in heinous
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crimes
such as gory killing,
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
cold blooded
murder, rape,
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arsons
out of vengeance etc.

In contrast
to such views, I hold a
slightly
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different
opinion when the
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crimes
are petty and born out of compulsion or
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some
grave circumstances. That’s why I believe that the minor
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crimes
like
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pickpocketing
, thefts where the motive of commission of such
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crimes
is to sustain one’s family should
be treated
differently
. An opportunity to reform should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to such person committing such minor
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offences
. We cannot
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change
our society by crowding our prison cells. Imparting education and providing quality jobs are prerequisites of reforming such
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

Therefore
, in my conclusion, I would like to
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summarise
my viewpoint that education alone can
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help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
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people
away from the criminal world. The punitive measures should
be adopted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in case of serious
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offences
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay IELTS WRITING TASK -2 Sending criminals to the prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training more are better ways to help them. with thi v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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