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Program to Provide Free TutoringThe university has announced that starting with the fall semester, free tutoring will be available to all new students for their entire first year. The academic dean. James Maxwell, commented. "The university is aware of th v.2

Program to Provide Free TutoringThe university has announced that starting with the fall semester, free tutoring will be available to all new students for their entire first year. The academic dean. James Maxwell, commented. "The university is aware of th v. 2
Technology is getting more and more advanced. And thousands of devices are produced in order to serve users’ high demands. In my opinion, I agree that many public are keen on purchasing new phones, new desktops or other newest devices because of following reasons. First of all, people can enjoy the advanced features from modern technology. There are new features which are updated with new version. For example, the Samsung Galaxy S10 has voice commands which they can say key works to search information instead of typing words. It’s time-saving and it’s the best way for English learners to practice speaking skill. In addition, new phone can fix some technical problems with the old one. For instance, on iOS 13, Apple applies private feature. Users can allow any application that follows their GPS or not. Obviously, their private information is secure. Second, buyers own devices for happiness. For example, my friend works hardly and earns a lot of money. As a result, she buys an iPhone 6 plus because it has always been her dream for a long time and she can keep up with current technology. It’s clear that new device can make people satisfied. Finally, new devices make people more sociable. To illustrate, when new an iPhone 6 connects to the internet, people can make friends and relative abroad to talk and maintain relationship among members. It’s clear that devices make people more sociable. In conclusion, because of different reasons like advanced features, being happy, the customers would like to have the best devices in order to do their tasks. It’s good for some people to buy the newest devices as long as they can afford them
Technology is getting more and more advanced. And thousands of
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devices
are produced
in order to serve users’ high demands. In my opinion, I
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agree
that
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many
public are keen on purchasing
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new
phones,
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new
desktops or other newest
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devices
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because
of following reasons.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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people
can enjoy the advanced features from modern technology. There are
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new
features which
are updated
with
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new
version.
For example
, the Samsung Galaxy S10 has voice commands which they can say key works to search information
instead
of typing words. It’s time-saving and it’s the best way for English learners to practice speaking
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skill
.
In addition
,
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new
phone can
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fix
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some
technical problems with the
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old
one.
For instance
, on iOS 13, Apple applies private
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feature
. Users can
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allow
any application that follows their GPS or not.
Obviously
, their private information is secure.

Second, buyers
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own
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devices
for happiness.
For example
, my friend works hardly and earns
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a lot of
money.
As a result
, she
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buys
an iPhone 6 plus
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because
it has always been her dream for a long
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time and
she can
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keep
up with
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current
technology. It’s
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clear
that
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new
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device
can
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make
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people
satisfied.

Finally
,
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new
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devices
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make
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people
more sociable. To illustrate, when
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new
an iPhone 6 connects to the internet,
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people
can
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make
friends and relative abroad to talk and maintain relationship among members. It’s
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clear
that
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devices
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make
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people
more sociable.

In conclusion
,
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because
of
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different
reasons like advanced features, being happy, the customers would like to have the best
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devices
in order to do their tasks. It’s
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good
for
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some
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people
to
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buy
the newest
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devices
as long as they can afford
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them
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Program to Provide Free TutoringThe university has announced that starting with the fall semester, free tutoring will be available to all new students for their entire first year. The academic dean. James Maxwell, commented. "The university is aware of th v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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