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Professionals like doctors, teachers and lawyers contribute equally to society with non-professionals including entertainers and sportspeople. Thus, they should receive equal pay. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v.1

Professionals like doctors, teachers and lawyers contribute equally to society with non-professionals including entertainers and sportspeople. Thus, they should receive equal pay. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 1
Everyone has the freedom to choose whichever career they wanted to pursue, be it a professional or a non-professional job. While minimum salary rates are allocated according to one’s profession, some argued that both prospects should receive equal payment. I strongly disagree that professionals and non-professionals should be paid equally because each field require different preparation effort and work demand. Typically, professional careers demanded specific skillsets that can only be acquired through tedious amount of preparation and stringent qualification. Burning the midnight oil and gruelling series of examinations are the common prerequisites to qualify, even as mere junior professionals. On the contrary, the non-professionals are not bound by strict schedules in order to achieve a similar level of success. In fact, most of the artists and sportsmen simply require a stroke of luck that springboards them to any hall of fame. To illustrate, an actor’s accidental role in a popular movie genre or a footballer’s last minute scoring kick is all that it takes to change their career lives. In addition, professionals require a different level of work responsibility and liability. Most of them have their own established governing body to ensure the quality of work and services are in line with industry expectations. This also mean the professionals are be held liable for every decision they made. Doctors, for instance, can be legally tried even for slight misconduct or negligence of work. In this case, the non-professionals have more freedom to express or conduct their work as long as no public hazard is concerned. To conclude, professionals and non-professionals should be rewarded differently for their work. Depending on the nature
Everyone has the freedom to choose whichever career they wanted to pursue, be it a
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professional
or a
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non-professional
job. While minimum salary rates
are allocated
according to one’s profession,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
argued that both prospects should receive equal payment. I
strongly
disagree that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professionals
and non-professionals should
be paid
equally
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because
each field require
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different
preparation effort and
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work
demand.

Typically
,
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professional
careers demanded specific
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skillsets
that can
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only
be acquired
through tedious amount of preparation and stringent qualification. Burning the midnight oil and
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gruelling
series of examinations are the common prerequisites to qualify, even as mere junior
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professionals
.
On the contrary
, the non-professionals are not bound by strict schedules in order to achieve a similar level of success. In fact, most of the artists and sportsmen
simply
require a stroke of luck that springboards them to any hall of fame. To illustrate, an actor’s accidental role in a popular movie genre or a footballer’s last minute scoring kick is all that it takes to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their career
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lives
.

In addition
,
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professionals
require a
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different
level of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
responsibility and liability. Most of them have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
established governing body to ensure the quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and services are in line with industry expectations. This
also
mean the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professionals
are
Consider using a past participle here: "been".
be
held liable for every decision they made. Doctors,
for instance
, can be
legally
tried even for slight misconduct or negligence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
In this case
, the non-professionals have more freedom to express or conduct their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
as long as no public hazard
is concerned
.

To conclude
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professionals
and non-professionals should
be rewarded
differently
for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. Depending on the
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
nature
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Professionals like doctors, teachers and lawyers contribute equally to society with non-professionals including entertainers and sportspeople. Thus, they should receive equal pay. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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