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"Prevention is better than cure"Out of countries health budget, a large portion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

"Prevention is better than cure"Out of countries health budget, a large portion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? v. 1
There are those who argue friends should have similar points of view for their friendship to success, while others support that having different opinions can be beneficial to these people. This essay will discuss both sides of this argument and I will provide my own perspective on this matter. To begin with, people usually prefer to spend time together with those who have the same tastes and opinions as them. By sharing equal views, they increase the likelihood of stricking a new relationship and therefore reduce the probability of conflict. For example, those within the same political spectrum are more likely to support each other’s ideas, which might be helpful in times of strong division, such as elections. Otherwise, if friends do not share a reasonable set of equal interests and opinions, their friendship might not get enough traction to continue to be developed. However, in most scenarios, it is possible for a friendship to nourish due to unequal ways of thinking, especially in professional environments. Differences can be quite helpful in debates and discussions, since they allow the speakers to evolve ideas and elaborate about opposing arguments. For instance, successful brainstorming sections usually rely on a myriad of views to establish a final set of feasible solutions. As a result, the potencial advantages brought by different opinions can stimulate people to come closer to each other, even outside of the workplace, since it brings clear benefits. In conclusion, I believe both sides have merits. On balance, even though differences can spark unpleasant discussions, I strongly support that most people can take advantage of having friends with opposing opinions, since this allows for more complex discussions, which might lead to positive outcomes.
There are those who argue friends should have similar points of view for their friendship to success, while others support that having
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different
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can be beneficial to these
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people
. This essay will discuss both sides of this argument and I will provide my
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own
perspective on this matter.

To
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begin
with,
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people
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prefer to spend time together with those who have the same tastes and
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as them. By sharing equal views, they increase the likelihood of
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stricking
a new relationship and
therefore
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the probability of conflict.
For example
, those within the same political spectrum are more likely to support each other’s
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ideas
, which might be helpful in times of strong division, such as elections.
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opinions
, their friendship might not
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get
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enough
traction to continue to
be developed
.

However
, in most scenarios, it is possible for a friendship to nourish due to unequal ways of thinking,
especially
in professional environments. Differences can be quite helpful in debates and discussions, since they
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allow
the speakers to evolve
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ideas
and elaborate about opposing arguments.
For instance
, successful brainstorming sections
usually
rely on a myriad of views to establish a final set of feasible solutions.
As a result
, the
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potencial
advantages brought by
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different
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opinions
can stimulate
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people
to
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come
closer to each other, even
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outside of
the workplace, since it brings
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clear
benefits.

In conclusion
, I believe both sides have merits. On balance,
even though
differences can spark unpleasant discussions, I
strongly
support that most
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people
can take advantage of having friends with opposing
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opinions
, since this
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allows
for more complex discussions, which might lead to
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positive
outcomes.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay "Prevention is better than cure"Out of countries health budget, a large portion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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