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Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? You shoul v.40

Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? You shoul v. 40
It is commonly said that ounce of prevention is better than pounds of cure and it stands valid not only in personal wellbeing but also the money spent on treatments of diseases. I strongly hold the opinion that massive proportion of health budget should be allocated for awareness on healthy life and steps to prevent the illness. Healthy nation is also referred as strong nation and many countries support the idea of preventing the disease rather than focusing in cure. There are different reasons of having such rationales. Firstly, serious illness makes the life miserable and sometimes even after treatment; people are not able to live the normal life. For example, my aunt who was suffering from cancer and was given chemotherapy which removed the disease up-to some extent but excessive therapy damaged the other vital parts. Another reason is related to large funds which are spent on maintaining the hospitals for providing various treatments to citizens, could be utilized in other essential service such as education, sanitation, infrastructure etc. , in turn these measure will help to eradicate the infectious diseases. According to WHO, many under developed countries outlay the money on hospitals or local dispensary but do not have proper sanitation or education institutes in even cities. Finally, in competitive world, only healthy nation can survive well and preventions policy fits well in achieving this goal. Prevention covers the exercise, proper meal, proper lifestyle etc. which helps the citizen to fulfill their dreams. For instance, Michle Philips won the Olympic medals seven times and highlighted the fitness factor as key to nail the target. To sum-up, though it is not possible to eliminate the diseases completely, prevention of it can helps millions to avoid suffering. Therefore, a large proportion of health budget should be spent on health education, training on better life style and exercise.
It is
commonly
said that ounce of
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prevention
is better than pounds of cure and it stands valid not
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only
in personal
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wellbeing
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but
also
the money spent on treatments of
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diseases
. I
strongly
hold the opinion that massive proportion of health budget should
be allocated
for awareness on healthy
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life
and steps to
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prevent
the illness.

Healthy nation is
also
referred as strong nation and
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many
countries support the
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idea
of preventing the
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disease
rather
than focusing in cure. There are
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different
reasons of having such rationales.
Firstly
, serious illness
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makes
the
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life
miserable and
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sometimes
even after treatment;
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people
are not able to
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live
the normal
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life
.
For example
, my aunt who was suffering from cancer and was
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given
chemotherapy which removed the
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disease
up-to
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some
extent
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but
excessive therapy damaged the other vital parts.

Another reason
is related
to large funds which
are spent
on maintaining the hospitals for providing various treatments to citizens, could
be utilized
in other essential service such as education, sanitation, infrastructure etc.
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,
in turn these measure will
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help
to eradicate the infectious
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diseases
. According to
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WHO
,
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many
under
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developed countries
outlay the money on hospitals or local dispensary
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but
do not have proper sanitation or education institutes in even cities.

Finally
, in competitive world,
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only
healthy nation can survive well and
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preventions
policy fits well in achieving this goal.
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Prevention
covers the exercise, proper meal, proper lifestyle etc. which
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helps
the citizen to fulfill their dreams.
For instance
,
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Michle
Philips won the Olympic medals seven times and highlighted the fitness factor as key to nail the target.

To sum-up, though it is not possible to eliminate the
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diseases
completely,
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prevention
of it can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "help"
helps
millions to avoid suffering.
Therefore
, a large proportion of health budget should
be spent
on health education, training on better
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life
style and exercise.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? You shoul v. 40

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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