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Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? You shoul v.23

Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? You shoul v. 23
Traditional cultural symbols are increasingly being used to boost local tourism. Some people support this move as they believe that their local cultures can be perpetuated in this way; however, other people argue that making money from cultural traditions will eventually destroy their indigenous culture. In my opinion, culture based tourism protects rather than destroy traditional cultures and values. Integrating traditional cultural aspects with local tourism provides greater exposure to these cultures. To be specific, by showcasing indigenous activities, handcrafts and artworks in front of international travellers, local residents are actually putting their own cultures under the spotlight of the whole world. This will help spread their culture all over the world and more and more people will be interested in visiting those holiday destinations which are famous for the exotic cultural experiences they provide. This will not only boost local culture and traditions, but also help local artists and artisan earn a better livelihood. For example, this is a great way to promote local art and dance forms that may be losing popularity among the native audience. On the other hand, over exploitation of cultural traditions for the sake of tourism may inevitably cause issues. If the local culture is coarsely adapted to suit the purpose of tourism, the tourist experience is compromised and this may actually show the culture in a bad light. For example, when I was travelling in Yunnan Province in the Southwest China, I took part in a cultural experience tour so as to know more about the local culture. However, the tour was poorly designed and all participants were made to buy local handicrafts. It left a negative impression on me and I will not recommend this place to any of my friends. In other words, for many destinations, the merging / amalgamation of culture and tourism is doing more harm than good. In conclusion, there is no harm in using culture to promote tourism. It not only enhances the reputation of the country, but also provides a livelihood to local artists. However, it is essential to do this in an aesthetic manner so that the effect is not counterproductive.
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symbols are
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tourism
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support this
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cultures
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argue that making money from
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traditions will
eventually
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destroy
their indigenous
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culture
. In my opinion,
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culture
based
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tourism
protects
rather
than
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destroy
traditional
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cultures
and values.

Integrating traditional
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cultural
aspects with
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local
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tourism
provides greater exposure to these
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cultures
. To be specific, by showcasing indigenous activities, handcrafts and artworks in front of international
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travellers
,
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residents are actually putting their
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own
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cultures
under the spotlight of the whole world. This will
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help
spread their
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culture
all over the world and more and more
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people
will
be interested
in visiting those holiday destinations which are
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famous
for the exotic
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cultural
experiences they provide. This will not
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only
boost
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local
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culture
and traditions,
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also
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help
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local
artists and artisan earn a better livelihood.
For example
, this is a great way to promote
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local
art and dance forms that may be losing popularity among the native audience.

On the other hand
, over exploitation of
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cultural
traditions for the sake of
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tourism
may
inevitably
cause issues. If the
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local
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culture
is
coarsely
adapted to suit the purpose of
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tourism
, the tourist experience
is compromised
and this may actually
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show
the
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culture
in a
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bad
light.
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, when I was travelling in Yunnan Province in the Southwest China, I
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took part
in a
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experience tour
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know more about the
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local
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culture
.
However
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designed and all participants
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to
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buy
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local
handicrafts. It
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left
a
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impression on me and I will not recommend this place to any of my friends.
In other words
, for
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many
destinations, the merging / amalgamation of
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culture
and
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tourism
is doing more harm than
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good
.

In conclusion
, there is no harm in using
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culture
to promote
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tourism
. It not
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only
enhances the reputation of the country,
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but
also
provides a livelihood to
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local
artists.
However
, it is essential to do this
Consider replacing "in an aesthetic manner" with the adverb for "aesthetic"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an aesthetic manner
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that the effect is not counterproductive.
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IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. " Out of a country's health budget, large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. with this statement? You shoul v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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