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Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases are too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v.37

Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases are too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 37
Nowadays, It is always debated whether Precautionary measures ought to be taken rather than curing the diseases, which is often expensive. However, In my opinion, I agree that taking Preventive steps are better than curing because Curing does not work in all the Scenarios and Precautionary measures save more people. On one hand, the impact of curing diseases on an individual person certainly have its merits, However, Preventing the diseases is considered better approach as the disease can be diagnosed in the initial stages and it can be stopped before it spreads. Furthermore, The Success rate of treating the sickness is smaller compared with averting it, which is done before the illness is found. For instance, A person can be prevented from risking to Cancer, however, Relieving a person from 3rd stage of Cancer is considered to be tough. On the other hand, Preventive measures have a greater impact on an individual, In most of the cases vaccination to certain serious sickness helps in averting the problem. Rather than individual people trying to take preventive steps, they are more focused on remedies, Consequently, not many people can be saved by it. Where as taking necessary steps before the illness, helps a person in the very first stages, which leads to save further. To illustrate, Children suffering from Polio dropped by 99% in India after vaccination services are provided to them in childhood. In Conclusion, Although Treating the diseases helps people free from serious sickness, the remedies do not help in saving more number of lives. Where as particular precautions have major impact in restoring an individual to normal life.
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be taken
rather
than curing the
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diseases
, which is
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often
expensive.
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, In my opinion, I
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agree
that taking Preventive steps are better than curing
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because
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people
.

On one hand, the impact of curing
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diseases
on an
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individual
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person
certainly
have its merits,
However
, Preventing the
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diseases
is considered
better approach as the
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disease
can
be diagnosed
in the initial stages and it can be
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stopped
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before
it spreads.
Furthermore
, The Success rate of treating the sickness is smaller compared with averting it, which
is done
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before
the illness
is found
.
For instance
, A
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person
can be
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prevented
from risking to Cancer,
however
, Relieving a
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person
from 3rd stage of Cancer
is considered
to be tough.

On the other hand
, Preventive measures have a greater impact on an
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individual
, In most of the
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cases
vaccination to certain serious sickness
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helps
in averting the problem.
Rather
than
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individual
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people
trying to take preventive steps, they are more focused on remedies,
Consequently
, not
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many
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people
can
be saved
by it.
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taking necessary steps
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before
the illness,
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helps
a
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person
in the
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very
first
stages, which leads to save
further
. To illustrate, Children suffering from Polio dropped by 99% in India after vaccination services
are provided
to them in childhood.

In Conclusion
, Although Treating the
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diseases
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helps
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people
free from serious sickness, the remedies do not
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help
in saving more number of
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lives
.
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Where as
particular precautions have major impact in restoring an
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individual
to normal life.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases are too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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