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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree? v.10

“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 10
Proper treatment of diseases can be an expensive process; therefore, taking precautions before disease progression seems like the cheaper alternative. This essay agrees that taking precautions is beneficial than treating the disease after occurrence. Long standing immunization has been a turning point in the medical history that is considered primary prevention and prevention is a less aggressive to other treatment options. Immunization, the modern miracle in health care, has become the best disease prevention method. Healthcare professionals are encouraging everyone to receive their mandatory vaccines in order to prevent most of the infectious diseases and it has been very successful in combating most of the diseases. If these vaccines were not available, it would cost a huge a sum of money to treat diseases like polio as these are disabling disorders and would require routine tests. For example, Health Canada, the major health governing body in Canada, published that vaccines cut the annual health care cost by 2 million dollars as many patients do not require constant surveillance. Preventative actions are also better in terms of its aggressiveness. Serious consequences can be observed in major medications and should be avoided if possible while simple preventative measures would not have any significant side effects. A person can take a simple example to demonstrate this idea. Blood thinning medications for heart diseases can cause significant bleeding if a patient has a cut; however, walking 45 minutes a day is equally protective for heart diseases and has minimal side effects. In my opinion, taking precautions for diseases are better in terms of tackling the health care costs. In conclusion, immunization has significantly reduced the health care burden which proves the effectiveness of primary prevention and primary prevention has minimal side effects as oppose to the actual disease.
Proper treatment of
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diseases
can be an expensive process;
therefore
, taking precautions
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before
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disease
progression seems like the cheaper alternative. This essay
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agrees
that taking precautions is
Use "(beneficial)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
beneficial
than treating the
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disease
after occurrence.
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Long standing
immunization has been a turning point in the medical history that
is considered
primary
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prevention
and
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prevention
is a less aggressive to other treatment options.

Immunization, the modern miracle in
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health
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care
, has become the best
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disease
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prevention
method. Healthcare professionals are encouraging everyone to receive their mandatory vaccines in order to
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prevent
most of the infectious
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diseases
and it has been
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very
successful in combating most of the
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diseases
. If these vaccines were not available, it would cost a huge a sum of money to treat
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diseases
like polio as these are disabling disorders and would require routine
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tests
.
For example
,
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Health
Canada, the major
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health
governing body in Canada, published that vaccines
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cut
the annual
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health
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care
cost by 2 million dollars as
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many
patients do not require constant surveillance.

Preventative actions are
also
better in terms of its aggressiveness. Serious consequences can
be observed
in major medications and should
be avoided
if possible while simple preventative measures would not have any significant side effects. A person can take a simple example to demonstrate this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
. Blood thinning medications for heart
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diseases
can cause significant bleeding if a patient has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
;
however
, walking 45 minutes a day is
equally
protective for heart
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diseases
and has minimal side effects.

In my opinion, taking precautions for
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diseases
are better in terms of tackling the
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health
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care
costs.
In conclusion
, immunization has
significantly
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reduced
the
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health
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care
burden which proves the effectiveness of primary
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prevention
and primary
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prevention
has minimal side effects
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as oppose to
the actual
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disease
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay “Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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