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''Prevention is better than cure''. Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree v.27

''Prevention is better than cure''. Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. 27
Technology has become an integral part of the economy in the modern society. Developments in medical technology and health care systems, among many other factors, are leading to people having longer life expectancy than before. Some people think that spending more money on finding out some treatments is a better idea than investing in others. I firmly agree with this idea and I will examine some reasons to support my idea. On the positive side, it is true that keep continuing make new medical treatments is a good way in order to save mankind. The human life is more valuable than money. Creating new vaccine for diseases can save many people. Research is costly, but it will allow professional to find a cure and control the spread of illness in the future. If the government does not spend money on researching the new vaccine, the virus can transfer person to person easily and, eventually, the huge number of people would die from the virus. Another consider point is that developed health care system can rapidly growth of the economy. For example, Korea, the system of hospital or other health care system is well organized besides the cost of surgery in Korea is fairly cheap, this is the reason why most visitors go to Korea. Take an example of that, the corona19 has become serious in the world. While many people are suffering this virus in many countries, however the situation of virus in Korea has gradually become better than any other countries, which means the hospitalize of this country is well structured In conclusion, the process of creating new medicines is fairly high, but it is more important to save human life.
Technology has become an integral part of the economy in the modern society. Developments in medical technology and health care
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systems
, among
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many
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other
factors, are leading to
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people
having longer life expectancy than
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before
.
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Some
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people
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think
that spending more money on finding out
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some
treatments is a better
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idea
than investing in others. I
firmly
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agree
with this
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idea
and I will examine
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some
reasons to support my
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idea
.

On the
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positive
side, it is true that
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keep
continuing
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make
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new
medical treatments is a
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good
way in order to save mankind. The human life is more valuable than money. Creating
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new
vaccine for diseases can save
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many
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people
. Research is costly,
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but
it will
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allow
professional to find a cure and control the spread of illness in the future. If the
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government
does not spend money on researching the
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new
vaccine, the virus can transfer person to person
easily
and,
eventually
, the huge number of
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people
would
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die
from the virus.

Another consider point is that developed health care
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system
can
rapidly
growth of the economy.
For example
, Korea, the
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system
of hospital or
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other
health care
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system
is well organized
besides
the cost of surgery in Korea is
fairly
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cheap
, this is the reason why most visitors go to Korea. Take an example of that, the corona19 has become serious in the world. While
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many
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people
are suffering this virus in
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many
countries,
however
the situation of virus in Korea has
gradually
become better than any
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other
countries, which means
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'hospitalize' is correct. If 'hospitalize' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the hospitalize
of this country is
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well structured


In conclusion
, the process of creating
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new
medicines is
fairly
high,
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but
it is more
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important
to save human life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay ''Prevention is better than cure''. Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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