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Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree? v.25

Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. v. 25
Prevention is better than medicine. Researching and treating diseases is too costly, so it would be better to spend money on preventive measures. I concur the above statement. Firstly, It is better to fix the disease as prevention than treatment. It makes you to take care of yourself And follow precautionary measures. For example, now, corona virus, it spread all over the world. Now in my country it was more over 100 cases are identified. Although, WHO told to be cautious and take it seriously and follow measures like washing your hands with soaps/using alcohol based Sanitizers which makes them to prevent the disease, furthermore when you have to cover using tissues while you are coughing or sneezing. Use masks while you are travelling. Then, prevention is better than placebo. There are no medicines as well. Now in Italy every guy is affected who ever travelled to foreign countries will easily affect you from them. Keep distance from them who ever coughing or sneezing and affected life as well. Secondly However, Some diseases will be like AIDS and cancer will affect you if you take care as well. Like cancer generally caused by cigarette smoking. For example, If someone is smoking and others may affected by air as a source it will be affected as well. If any one using Aids patient things it will be effected for them as well. Despite, in saloon, shops if the affected body blade is used for another customer, it will cause you aids as well. You should be very careful in public transportation or any other places where a group of people you should be very careful about incoming diseases cover your nose and mouth get rid of disease causing viruses. Finally, in my opinion prevention I better than drugs. It takes so much time for doctors to prepare medicines until then a plethora of patients will also die. So I recommend to be cautious and preventive measures and follow the best diet.
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Prevention
is
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better
than medicine. Researching and treating
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diseases
is too costly,
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so
it would be
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better
to spend money on preventive
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measures
. I concur the above statement.

Firstly
, It is
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better
to
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fix
the
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disease
as
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prevention
than treatment. It
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makes
you to take care of yourself

And follow precautionary
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measures
.
For example
,
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now
,
The term "coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
corona virus
, it spread all over the world.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
in my country it was more over 100 cases
are identified
. Although, WHO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
to be cautious and take it
seriously
and follow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
measures
like washing your hands with soaps/using alcohol based Sanitizers which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disease
,
furthermore
when you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
cover using tissues while you are coughing or sneezing.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Use
masks while you are travelling. Then,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prevention
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
than placebo. There are no medicines as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
in Italy every guy is
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affected
who ever travelled to foreign countries will
easily
affect you from them.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Keep
distance from them who ever coughing or sneezing and
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affected
life
as well
.

Secondly
However
,
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Some
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diseases
will be like AIDS and cancer will affect you if you take care as
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well
. Like cancer
generally
caused by cigarette smoking.
For example
, If someone is smoking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
may
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affected
by air as a source it will be
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affected
as
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well
. If
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
using Aids patient things it will
be effected
for them as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
well
. Despite, in saloon, shops if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
affected
body blade is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for another customer, it will cause you aids as
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well
. You should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
careful in public transportation or any other places where a group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
you should be
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very
careful about incoming
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diseases
cover your nose and mouth
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disease
causing viruses.

Finally
, in my opinion
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prevention
I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
better
than drugs. It takes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much time for doctors to prepare medicines until then a plethora of patients will
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I
The verb 'recommend' is used with the gerund form: "recommend being".
recommend to be
cautious and preventive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
measures
and follow the best diet.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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