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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree. v.4

Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 4
Technology has been flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us new avenues while keeping ourselves updated with the latest news and current affairs. Therefore, a fair amount of people believe, a conventional way of newspaper reading will be disappeared. I do not completely accord with it because a conventional newspaper is an easiest and cheapest way to get news. To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting news are still popular. First of all, reading newspaper has become the ardent habit of many people. Everyone, whether from affluent or middle class are seen desperately waiting for paper in the morning and enjoy it reading with a cup of tea. Moreover, these are the most portable, cheapest an easiest way of knowing about the global activities. It can be carried from one place to another in the bag and available at an economical price. It is so handy and merely by continuing flip of pages can make you omniscient. Secondly, electricity and other appliances are not required. Moreover, the other attachments are like icing on the cake. For instance, the Hindustan times have multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and so on. However, undoubtedly, technology has given the radical approach to reading news, for example, the videos provide a full and clear view to reading besides that we can download, share and forward it to our relatives and friends. Needless to say that technophobic will be having no place in this ever-advanced modern world. To conclude, the lives of people are drastically affected by advanced versions of technology yet, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to the existence of traditional newspaper and magazines
Technology has been flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us
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new
avenues while keeping ourselves updated with the latest
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news
and
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current
affairs.
Therefore
, a
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fair
amount of
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people
believe, a conventional way of
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newspaper
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reading
will
be disappeared
. I do not completely accord with it
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because
a conventional
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newspaper
is an easiest and cheapest way to
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get
news.

To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting
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news
are
still
popular.
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First of all
,
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reading
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newspaper
has become the ardent habit of
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many
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people
. Everyone, whether from affluent or middle
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class
are
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seen
desperately
waiting for paper in the morning and enjoy it
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reading
with a cup of tea.
Moreover
, these are the most portable, cheapest
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an
easiest way of knowing about the global activities. It can
be carried
from one place to another in the bag and available at an economical price. It is
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so
handy and
merely
by continuing flip of pages can
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make
you omniscient.
Secondly
, electricity and other appliances are not required.
Moreover
, the other attachments are like icing on the cake.
For instance
, the Hindustan times have multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and
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so
on.

However
,
undoubtedly
, technology has
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given
the radical approach to
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reading
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news
,
for example
, the videos provide a full and
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clear
view to
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reading
besides
that we can download, share and forward it to our relatives and friends. Needless to say that
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technophobic
will be having no place in this ever-advanced modern world.

To conclude
, the
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lives
of
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people
are
drastically
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affected
by advanced versions of technology
yet
, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to the existence of traditional
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newspaper
and magazines
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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